The only thing scary about this creepypasta is that people like it.

@jayroo.Merkat

6 жыл бұрын

LightningE 9950 ikr

@tianavstheworld

6 жыл бұрын

I’m praying for humanity

@ashenknight4023

6 жыл бұрын

Tıαnα ιѕ Aωєѕoмє A futile effort, my friend. I've seen some messed up stuff, and humanity was responsible.

@russianname2986

6 жыл бұрын

I’m S4c3d

@williamaftondavemiller346

5 жыл бұрын

You shouldn't judge people for liking what they like. Even if this story is messed up.

1) So...being raped and beaten didn't make her self-mutilate in a horrible bizarre way, but breaking up with her boyfriend did? I guess you could argue it's the "straw that broke the camel's back" scenario, or that having the boyfriend was just what stopped her from hurting herself before, but it doesn't really work for me. It just, as you said, seems like poor writing, where the story topped itself early with much worse things happening to her, so it seems absurd when something like this upsets her so much more 2) A therapist wouldn't do that. They're not gonna freak out because a teenager goes on a whiny nihilist rant. Therapists hear much freakier shit all the time, that's their job. This is used to make Natalie seem all edgy and scary like OOOH THE THERAPIST FLED but it's such bullshit. Also, it's annoying how it's also used to blame everything on the therapist of all people, not on anyone who actually hurt or neglected Natalie, and certainly not on Natalie herself and her own choices 3) So, here's the big problem with Clockwork, Jeff the Killer, etc., and the fact that they're so sympathetic and their victims are all horrible assholes----it sucks the scary out of it. Because it's made clear that the only people who get killed are horrible, awful people who very personally earn it from the killer. That's not scary for a reader, because we don't feel it could happen to us. When something happens to someone good or innocent or just normal, that frightens us, because we see ourselves that way. We don't feel like we're bullies or abusers, so we don't have any fear at all that their punishments could ever possibly befall us. If you're rooting for the killer, you're not going to be scared of them.

@maykun070

4 жыл бұрын

Yeah, that's what makes abuser an abuser is that they don't actually feel they are abusers.

@imgone1360

3 жыл бұрын

The thing that I don't understand is why did she killed the mother when the mother didn't do anything? How is she still alive when her brother break her skull with a bat?

@ttpbroadcastingcompany.4460

2 жыл бұрын

On the second point, I come from experience on the matter. The therapist likely just left to do some sort of work to see what would be the best course of action to take. That or just said "Oh yeah, she cray cray." to her parents.

@katelynthewhitewerewolf6376

Жыл бұрын

​@@maykun070 It's always satisfying when jerk characters who are jerks to the main protagonist get karma

I just imagine Jeff the Killer going into children that can't sleeps room giving them warm milk and tucking them in saying go to sleep and leaving best creepypasta EVER

@tianavstheworld

7 жыл бұрын

OMFG YES YES YES SOMEONE NEEDS TO MAKE THIS- Actually i'm on it

@Densester

7 жыл бұрын

Drunkorange *better than the original thats for sure*

@SaintCharlos

7 жыл бұрын

_Oh, you gave me an idea (A remake out of the story). What if a child's parents invited a sitter named Jeff, that treated him well, do this what you said in the comment, and the child ended up having a long, rather creepy dream in which is the sitter's way to kill the child (Killing them inside the dream)?_

@heartofgoldenglass7723

7 жыл бұрын

Yes! Michael Jackson Joker fish should just give people warm milk and just sing lullabies to them.

@tiredcat5481

6 жыл бұрын

I would give this comment a well deserved like but...

I've got a new trollpasta idea, Cockwork a male version of Clockwork

@gingeetheginge6071

5 жыл бұрын

Some Lombax Sounds like a porn parody...oh god I’ve just put a horrible image in my head...

@ArcadeFanatic99

5 жыл бұрын

@@gingeetheginge6071 - Porn parody. - Original involves children, rape and violence. *Yeah my mental image isn't great either..*

@williamaftondavemiller346

5 жыл бұрын

There is a male version. He's call Clock-o or something like that.

@minhaesposanaomeama362

5 жыл бұрын

So....he would have a cock on his eye or what?

@matshbocks

5 жыл бұрын

@@minhaesposanaomeama362 nope, his ears is a phonograph

The 3 stages of learning about Clockwork: "I mean the art looks nice." "Oh boy...this is pretty bad." "why does she have a stand"

@atanaZion

2 жыл бұрын

The art isn't nice

"Alright Clockwork, yer time is up!" "Who u callin' Clockwork?"

@katelynthewhitewerewolf6376

Жыл бұрын

Diamond Clockwork: I wanna be Dirty Dan Jeff and Smile: What makes you think you can be Dirty Dan? Clockwork: I'm dirtier than you

Oddly enough, I actually like Clockwork’s design appearance-wise. More neutral colors, the clock eye. At first glance, you’d think she’d be a cool protagonist in a steampunk or dystopian novel. But no, instead she’s part of an awfully written shock-value creepypasta.

@lifeofjeffrey2447

3 жыл бұрын

Someone please write a good version of the story

@thatterrariaguidenpc8054

3 жыл бұрын

clockwork your time is up but the plot is about some girl who tries to time travel just to save her past self from the horrors she went through she didnt became a cheesy stupid serial killer but rather just a self saving hero who wants to save her young self from traumatic bullshit lol

@atanaZion

2 жыл бұрын

Her design isn't that good too

@cloudwyrms9752

2 жыл бұрын

@@atanaZion I just mean based on first appearances, it’s not too over the top

@katelynthewhitewerewolf6376

Жыл бұрын

​@@cloudwyrms9752 I like her design in fact they all have awesome designs especially Laughing Jack his design is so much better than the usual way clowns always look.

Clockwork: I am an invincible serial killer, and I managed to kill all the people I hated, and continue to kill people to this day! Sakuya: Sorry I did a better job at killing then you did, and I can kill you even with your sue powers! Dio: I can stop time, I am a vampire, and the most famous character in my franchise, and compared to me you’re nothing like me!

@ttpbroadcastingcompany.4460

3 жыл бұрын

Some dipshit space farmer with a flashlight: Fuck you! LASGUN!

@bradygliwa2662

4 ай бұрын

Kurumi: Look, you might share a clock-like eye & kill anyone in you way like me, but I, at least, have a goal in mind.

@JoelitoStriker

3 ай бұрын

Keyaru: Ha Noobs! I r**ed and killed my abusers and earned a slave harem

Funny enough, given her childhood, "a Series of Unfortunate Events" would be a pretty appropriate title...

Someone should reboot the idea of Clockwork. It sounds like a great idea to have a killer's fascination over time but, the story is fucking horrid.

@mediumrhombus1514

7 жыл бұрын

rawrvintageisclassic yup

@user-hi9iw9du3v

7 жыл бұрын

rawrvintageisclassic I am planning on remaking it, though. :/

@Grey_Warden_Invasion

3 жыл бұрын

And if all the abuse stays in the story it should better be written by an auther who knows what they are doing and doesn't make it sound like an insult.

@lifeofjeffrey2447

3 жыл бұрын

I got you!

Ironic how this story is called about time, when it time skips once at 9 years, then at 7, and still sounds like it takes exactly 17 years to read. (That extra year is time giving you a second to understand the understandable)

If I wanted to improve Clockwork, here’s how I’d do it. What if her backstory was the polar opposite of what we’ve heard of her childhood? What if she had very loving parents, a good brother who was always looking out for her, and in general her life was quite good? Imagine that, as a child, she somehow gained an ability/curse that causes her to see the approximate time of someone’s death, but the numbers are constantly changing, and people can still die when they have plenty of time left. Imagine that she at some point saves someone who still had time from a car crash, only to realize that somehow by saving them, she just drained them of all of the time they had left and added it to her own counter, which has become more static. So now you’ve got a girl who can see that people have constantly changing amounts of time left, and she's caught on to the fact that the more it changes, the more likely they are to die. She develops a severe obsession with studying numbers, and how can she help people stabilize their timers and her own at the same time. One day she sees that her family’s timers are changing constantly, just like the person she “saved.” She braces herself for the inevitable...but it never comes. Days go by, their counters keep changing, but they just go about their business and nothing happens. Meanwhile, she's losing it, her grip on rationality is slipping, and she becomes convinced that the best thing to do is to just stop their counters (i.e., kill them). So she does just that, but realizes that their counters are still going after death. Hers, by comparison, has become that much slower. With that, she loses what fragile grasp on reality she had and makes it her goal to give the ultimate middle finger to whatever force or being playing this sick joke on her by taking the time of as many people with constantly changing timers as she can.

It's so edgy that i'm on the edge of my seat..

@user-hi9iw9du3v

7 жыл бұрын

Hehehe (listens to Famous Las Words and Welcome to the Black Parade)

@callumsparrow4379

7 жыл бұрын

ღShane Longღ It's as edgy as a Water Slide made out of Razor Blades.

@aubreykosch4227

7 жыл бұрын

ღShane Longღ Aw shit, I cut myself on the edge! Anyone got a bandaid?

@mishapp4439

6 жыл бұрын

I'm on the edge of the bridge

@cristalat101

6 жыл бұрын

ღShane Longღ I almost cut myself on that sharp edge

I think a way to make Clockwork better is this: make Natalie incredibly normal, an ordinary person no one would bat an eye at. Like, she'd have a few friends that she'd hang out with, an interest in art, talks, acts, eats, sleeps, _IS_ normal, and so in the crowd that you would've thought she was Waldo's sister or something. One day, she watches something creepy, or out of the ordinary, like she sees Emergency Metamorphosis (177103 for the Nhentai savvy) or something. She finds it interesting, and she realizes that the fucked up part of the world is something she _needs_ the be a part of, or lest she ceases to exist. She starts watching mature movies, checks out true crime shit, and starts using a big brain meme and slowly starts killing people. First, it's the kid next door, then it's Joshua from the convenient store, then starts murdering people she just doesn't feel like they should exist. One day, she gets caught and sent to an asylum. When she is in a room with a therapist, she starts talking about her feelings of wanting to stay weird that she cannot fathom the fact that what she's doing is wrong. The story ends in such an ambiguous way that it is hard to say if she's real or fake, or if she's alive or dead. I mean, this sounds stupid, but at least this makes everything sound significantly better than what we got.

@ttpbroadcastingcompany.4460

2 жыл бұрын

But by that point, the original idea of her being called Clockwork would be lost. I figure it should be more focused on time. Have her be a watchmaker who's tired of the ticking. Of the mind-numbing repetition of every day life. So instead, she just goes postal one day and begins to kill people in creative, time and clock based scenarios. She still carves out her own eye, but it's more for symbolism rather than "Oh, look how cool it is!". She does the same to her victims, while also mocking them for being late. Eventually, she'd be caught and forced into an asylum, forced to hear the ticking of clocks for all eternity in silent torment.

@atanaZion

2 жыл бұрын

@@ttpbroadcastingcompany.4460 Just give her OCD

the story is basically a giant middle finger to the readers and good creepypasta stories

Honestly the worst part of this story in my opinion is the mishandle and abuse of the concept and the horrible issue of rape, because as someone who recently had a close friend who was sexually assaulted, its insulting how the story doesn't deal with any of the nuance and problems the act causes, and how it can hurt a person. It instead uses rape as nothing more then a plot device that begs for sympathy for the main character

@ProphetLot

11 ай бұрын

True but I feel like they should not have added it in the first place

NATALIE USES [THE WORLD]

@johnoconnell5004

5 жыл бұрын

WRYYYYYYYY!

@abandonedindefinitely-h4l

4 жыл бұрын

OniFlames OfBlueArt *nO-*

@tomjackjack960

3 жыл бұрын

@OniFlames OfBlueArt the author of jojo has already made one,go see Thus Spoke Kishibe Rohan

@tomjackjack960

3 жыл бұрын

@OniFlames OfBlueArt don't need that creepypasta bullcrap

If I was the one that created Clockwork, I would have given her history with a clock. It would be time-themed and whatever. I was planning on remaking it.

I swear to god if this man finds the bad Creepypasta I wrote when I was 10 I will cry.

@MinatheRaichu

5 жыл бұрын

Link.

@lasagnalover1185

3 жыл бұрын

G i v e u s t h e l i n k

@chromatic-doodlieus09

2 жыл бұрын

NOW

@Convoy143

2 жыл бұрын

HAND IT OVER

@kupkate04

Жыл бұрын

I need to read this.

I just read clockwork's story today and now I realize why so many people hate. It's stupid, insensitive, always skips through time, makes random stuff happen out of nowhere, and uses RAPE which I hate in a story.

@MrsNotorials

3 жыл бұрын

@@katelynthewhitewerewolf6376 You're saying "but" like that invalidates the point above, which it doesn't. It's legitimately confusing me on what your point Is.

@atanaZion

2 жыл бұрын

Rape is a great narrative element for several reasons,wdym?

@dosie1787

Жыл бұрын

@@atanaZion it can be, but i dont like how clockworks story throws it in there for shock, this kind of thing in writing about a character can be good if its done right but when its not done right its just very uncomfortable to read

@katelynthewhitewerewolf6376

Жыл бұрын

​@@MrsNotorials Sally's Uncle Johnny raped his niece and I don't see anyone complaining about her story except for the Uncle Johnny rape part.

@katelynthewhitewerewolf6376

Жыл бұрын

​@@atanaZion And look what Sally's Uncle Johnny did to her he raped her and killed her luckily she gave him really good karma.

if i made a killer story, i would make the killer a psychopath and make the fucker not care about anyone. like somewhat of a standard comic book villian and make the killer unlikeable on purpose

@tianavstheworld

6 жыл бұрын

Exactly lmfao

@lucaschannel726

6 жыл бұрын

tyrantking9000 that is so good

@catcheshire2051

6 жыл бұрын

But that sounds a little boring, don't you think?

@tyrantking9000

6 жыл бұрын

only if done horribly.

@atanaZion

2 жыл бұрын

@@catcheshire2051 Not much, if it's well made. You don't need to feel sy.pathy towards the villain to make him good

"Lazy town the truth"

@blackheartzerotheundergrou3225

6 жыл бұрын

"Oh, are all the characters dead and Lazytown is Purgatory?" "... No. Sportacus and Robbie Rotten were totally fucking on the side." "... O-oh. Okay then."

@chiamrandall8188

4 жыл бұрын

Blackheartzero, the Underground Song Critic I mean that’s just canon.

@blackheartzerotheundergrou3225

3 жыл бұрын

@@katelynthewhitewerewolf6376 Thank you, Pokémon #079.

I have to ask you a question. We can all agree that rape is not used well in this story but can you give me an example or explain to me an instance where it can be used effectively?

@FishStickOnAStick

8 жыл бұрын

Now that's a real tricky question, and I can dance around it and say that art is subjective so everyone is going to interpret it differently, but I'll try not to cop out here because this is basically a show to teach you how to be a better writer. Much like death affects the narrative progression of a story, rape affects the progression of the character, it affects how they react to situations and people. So a character might feel more terrified just walking around at night than they would before. So if your character is raped over the course of the story, it would be best to introduce them prior, have the rape be after we've gotten to know them, that way it's easier to empathize with them because we give a shit about them and not because "oh no, they were raped and that's bad, I feel bad for them." I also feel like it should sort of take center stage and have a good portion of the character and their actions be based around it, otherwise you'll have it feel like Clockwork where it's just there and almost never brought up again. If you have a character who's raped, but nothing really changes or the audience doesn't notice any changes, it feels tasteless and like it's used just for shock value. If you are going to sort of sideline it, let it be a side character or a minor character who was raped in the past. Having a character be raped as a backstory isn't a bad thing and can be used to explain motivations, mindset and actions. For instance in Telltale's Walking Dead game there's a sequence in Episode 2 where you're confronted by a deranged woman who it is heavily implied through her actions and dialogue was raped, potentially multiple times and potentially her daughter as well. The implicity here is a big part of what makes it work, rape is a horrifying act and to exemplify it, the horror should be underlying in a case like this. It can feel downright shocking when you make that realization after the fact, and in a good way, not a cheap way. Doing research so as not to be tasteless or inaccurate is also a good idea for writing anything really, not just rape. I think what's most important though, is how your character ultimately reacts to the situation. How do they come out of it? Do they let what happened to them control and consume them or do they stand up on their own two feet and try their hardest to move on? Either scenario is realistic, and there's a thousand more that could come out of it. You could write an inspirational story for those affected by rape, you could write a tragedy about someone who lets it eat away at them, you could write outright smut for rape fetishists, or you could write a piece of shit like Clockwork. But don't do that last one. Be better than that.

@Ripper517

7 жыл бұрын

me I don't know why I think I only like the character and the story is just the brutality

@AmeButCool

6 жыл бұрын

The book speak

@bee5917

6 жыл бұрын

Basically don't add rape to shock the audience. Clockwork's way of symbolizing rape is out of nowhere. If you wanna portray rape, make sure it flows nicely.

@Egalitariat-likesecretariat

6 жыл бұрын

An example of my own: I Spit On Your Grave. It's an infamous film centering on a female writer, a group of small-town guys, how the guys rape the writer and leave her for dead, and how everyone deals with the aftermath. There's a surprising amount of thought and decent performances put into it. Spoiler alert: everyone dies. Except the writer.

I actually love Clockworks design with the watch in her eye. It really unique unlike the mouth stitches which I think are pointless and overdone. I'm planning on rewriting her origins but just less... awful.

@galacticgamer6635

2 жыл бұрын

You can't possibly fail.

@atanaZion

2 жыл бұрын

It isn't unique,lol

Clock work, the most pointless killer out of the bunch.

But who WAS phone?

@mina973

7 жыл бұрын

StarfieldDisarray AND THEN A SKELETON POPPED OUT

@heartofgoldenglass7723

7 жыл бұрын

Your mother was phone.

@louiskeiflin5858

6 жыл бұрын

ILLUMINATI CONFIRMED.

@pumaman7072

5 жыл бұрын

But HOW is phone?

@aboredgarchomp482

5 жыл бұрын

But WHY is phone?

Holy shit I never realized how Natalie basically has [THE WORLD] when I read this originally. Dunno if it makes this story worse or better, probably worse

@thatterrariaguidenpc8054

3 жыл бұрын

o think the only explanation of this story was that Natalie was dio all along

I met your creepypasta channel from the TF2 videos. I can't believe how much I needed these creepypasta criticisms in my life. I know this channel has little to no viewers, but you can bet I'll be here to listen to your rants, Fish.

mary sue bingo. lol

@hodzal5258

4 жыл бұрын

Mary sues r likable to some degree, this on the other hand.....HA!

Gee. What a mary sue......... But not as much as a mary sue like Rey from star wars.

@greywalker505

Жыл бұрын

Press X to Doubt

from what I can gather from some comments, this story was written because the writer was put through similar shit as a child. Although that IS unfortunate, and people need something to cope, problem is, creepypasta isn't exactly a place to go to in order to talk about trauma. If the writer wanted to tell their story, there's other places to talk about it, there's so many places that would be a safe space to go to for support, but the creepypasta community isn't one of them.

@ttpbroadcastingcompany.4460

2 жыл бұрын

Sometimes writing about it in a way that doesn't make it obvious helps.

@katelynthewhitewerewolf6376

Жыл бұрын

​@@ttpbroadcastingcompany.4460 Clockwork is so underrated.

Then who was phone!? Always gets me.

I wouldn't be surprised if there was a sequel were new characters with powers are like Walmart versions of the stardust crusaders to stop Natalie from getting the stone mask from becoming the ultimate life form

@ttpbroadcastingcompany.4460

2 жыл бұрын

This actually sounds interesting. Like, imagine a completely unhinged chick who's had to live as basically a crazy bum of sorts going up against an equally unhinged group of mall ninjas!

@GaiusIntrepidus

11 ай бұрын

Meet Joe Seth with the power of tentacle hentai and wasting money by destroying photography equipment, and his grandson Qtaro Platinum who copies everything Natalie does but with extra punchy-punchy

14:27 I didn't know Zoidberg wrote fanfiction

Ah, those short stories are classic.

Do The story of Real Chuck E Cheeses, that one was so bad I legitimately thought it was a troll pasta.

@louiskeiflin5858

6 жыл бұрын

But he claims the real Chuck E Cheese his favorite creepypasta.

Sadly Clockwork has fangirls

@user-hi9iw9du3v

7 жыл бұрын

You mean fanboys

@user-mz1rn3ll5s

6 жыл бұрын

why

@imgone1360

4 жыл бұрын

I've encounter them, her fans are so toxic that they made me leave the Creepypasta fandom for good

@nra3zehuti781

4 жыл бұрын

Why does this sound gay to me ?

@crimsondynamo615

4 жыл бұрын

Imagine being a simp for a fictional character of a shitty story

The way I was introduced to clockwork is through a rwby fanfiction where clockwork turned ruby into a goth chick and is training to kill ppl

@galacticgamer6635

2 жыл бұрын

what

@julianensor4416

2 жыл бұрын

why.

@atanaZion

2 жыл бұрын

Lmaoo

@tyrantking9000

Жыл бұрын

That's a thing?

@greywalker505

Жыл бұрын

As if the gratuitous murder wasn’t enough, now you’re grooming Ruby Rose to be your successor. Great job, Nat!

It’s so edgy, I’m on the edge of falling asleep

Not only does he tell the truth that Clockwork is trash but he also gives you writing tips lol

Was this Creepypasta one big Jojo reference?

I really love this and the last one, I like the Plinkett-esque approach to it.

Top 5 creepypastas: 5. Clockfuck: Your Time is Down 4. John the Killer 3. Super Mario 64 3D Planet 2. Fuck You (Mr. Balls Cellar) 1. The Rock Jackson

Your time is up My time is now You can’t see me My time is now

Man I miss when I was 14 and I knew my purpose

ironic meme

Because no one had done it yet: Stand Name: Time Keeps On Slipping Stand User: Natalie/Clockwork Power: A Speed: A Range: C Defense: A Precision: B Potential: B This stand allows the user to slow down time around them. Allowing the user the move and evade in incredible speeds.

Jeff the killer but his catchphrase makes sense. You gotta give the homie a goodnight kiss, that is what ran through my head

*Sutando Powah! Clockuhworkuu!*

Wow, I listened to Jordan Persegati’s version of the story and I thought it was good but finding out this was the original story is disappointing.

This story feels like it was meant to appeal to 8 year olds who became edgy too early who will definitely tell this around the campfire-

Jeff and Smile Woods and The Thievius Raccoonus

0:17 is that article real because I can’t find it?

Can you make a countdown of your favorite Bad Creepypasta moments?

Bullshit does indeed sum up this story.

I really don't like clockwork, I don't even believe she is a frickin creepypasta. Her story is just so cheesy that I really hate it

@Expressionlesscorpse

5 жыл бұрын

BigfootKatie same her and people ship with Toby even though they hate each other plus she is a lesbian

@CertifiedWeirdass

5 жыл бұрын

Clockwork is the ripoff version of Dio Brando. Edit: Wassup.

@Expressionlesscorpse

4 жыл бұрын

ok no agreed

@ttpbroadcastingcompany.4460

2 жыл бұрын

@@Expressionlesscorpse I'm not sure if you still believe this, but Toby and Clockwork are dating last time I checked.

doesn't clock work know time doesnt actually exist? its just a way of humans to know when its becoming night and day and all that😂

@makosimp5022

5 жыл бұрын

Time is an actual real thing. It's literally the 4th dimension

@tyrantking9000

3 жыл бұрын

*slowly starts making annoying clock noises, which makes someone's ears bleed*

NOOOO, GIRAFFE! YOU WERE MY FAVORITE WEEABOO!!

Oh my God it's so fucking edgy. *"CRAWLING IN MY SKIN. THESE WOUNDS, THEY WILL NOT HEALLLLLLLLL!!!"*

I've never gotten a shout out in a video before, I'm not quite sure how to feel.

I spent like 1 minute trying to recover from that guy barfing noodles into a toilet. Fuck that shit hurted

just a quick question, does anyone think its possible to make a scary story with no bloodshed at all?

@cuddlecomix9863

7 жыл бұрын

thank you,but i asked this question because i want to avoid what most people do, make a scary story with no mary sues,or murder,or any bloodshed.

@cuddlecomix9863

7 жыл бұрын

yee, i will!

@Persephone01

7 жыл бұрын

Yep, Ive written horror stories and Science fiction without the use of gore. Its just the lazy way of writing, which annoys me when they use the "Hyper realistic blood" line.

@user-hi9iw9du3v

7 жыл бұрын

Awkward Turtle! You can. I actually kinda hate bloodshed coz I have hemophobia ( I still watch Yandere Simulator).

@cuddlecomix9863

7 жыл бұрын

Thank you very much!Hard thing is how to come up with something scary, how does one create such tension in modern days?

Clockwork? Isn't this the ghost time thing from danny phantom or something?

It's just so impressive what people can come up with, it's insane.

@Expressionlesscorpse

4 жыл бұрын

Nexils no she is not nothing in common

I was watching the bad Creepypasta video on this " story"and I spit out the coke I was drinking at the rape part, not just because it was rape and incest, but because I share the name of the brother. I can never let my friends read this story or watch and readings of it on KZread, they will never let me live it down

@who_the_fuck_is_riley5813

6 жыл бұрын

My account name was too lon Damn. I feel really bad for you dude

@iguanaboi3921

6 жыл бұрын

Claire Turner it's ok. My best friend only watches nerd3. Not saying nerd3's a bad KZread, it's just the only channel he watches.

Trying to rip off Lemony Snicket is like trying to out "it just works" Todd Howard

I hate all creepy pastas that are humans or were humans.

AND SCENE im dying lmao

Hey, Fish. Have you seen "A Cold Love Story" and "A Cold Love Story Retold" by Liam Wickers? It's the same story; the former is told from an average joe who knows the villainous character 's POV and the latter is told from the villainous character 's POV. Both are done very well and actually compliment one another. '

Natalie was the author's name before they discovered(?) that they were trans(?). I've come across so many transtrenders that I'm not sure if they're actually trans or not.

@FishStickOnAStick

8 жыл бұрын

Glad to know I don't have to eat my Smokey the Bear hat.

@atanaZion

2 жыл бұрын

"Transtrenders" 💀

I actually had an idea for a Clockwork rewrite recently. It's in the *very* early stages, like, 'not even with a proper structure aside from the basic idea' early. So let me know if you like it! Instead of an origin story for her, it's a story about a detective investigating her various murders, maybe written like a case file. The detective carries around a pocket watch. During a confrontation with Nathalie, the detective shoots her in the eye. After she falls into a river, or runs away, or whatever, she comes back and ends up killing the detective, and decides to use his watch as a replacement eye. Maybe as a twisted show of respect for the one man that almost bested her. She constantly mentions looking for 'it.' It is never explained what 'it' is. Her parents are mostly the same, albeit toned down *a* *lot* from the original story, and her brother isn't a pedo, just an asshole. Cut out the whole time stuff, since it isn't even that important, and boom, a maybe half-decent version of Clockwork. New Title: The 'Clockwork' Casefile

Spoiler Alert: Clockwork gets gangrene and dies from hunger and thirst not even a month after 😆

@ttpbroadcastingcompany.4460

2 жыл бұрын

As it honestly would be for all of these teenage murderers. But then again, nobody ever thinks about that when it comes to ghost story logic.

I have a question; How would you say you would make a good killer/slasher character? Is there anyway you can make one in creepypasta or no?

@WhyYouMadBoi

7 жыл бұрын

Well a good killer/slasher is Freddy Kruger, Through 9 movies, a tv show, and a pop album.It shows how being immortal got the best of him causing him to kill in anyway he wants. He even has the set up of him bein a dream demon so he can get away with it. He looks like he's having fun killing teens and that's creepy if you think of it. Now he's a good character but as a killer he's hit or miss really.

@MonsieurMaskedMan

6 жыл бұрын

if its doesn't get a big fanbase its a good slasher, because that the slasher is so realistic that we just want to stop him like a real serial killer in the first place, the slasher is so uncanny and unrelated whatsoever that makes us think that we should stop him, for instance think that the stuntman mike character from Death Proof is a good slasher for a drama film he really like to teasing with the girls/victim before actually kill them in an instant car crash

@cristalat101

6 жыл бұрын

Friskan Studios I know it's NOWHERE near perfect but it's an improvement from jeff the killer Ticci toby my favourite creepypasta character

@atanaZion

2 жыл бұрын

@@WhyYouMadBoi If Freddy Kruger was born into the internet he'd a famous but bad creepypasta like most in these reviews

@katelynthewhitewerewolf6376

Жыл бұрын

​@@atanaZion He was made by Wes Craven but there is a Creepypasta Story called Straight From Elm Street which is like something out of a Nightmare On Elm Street movie scene.

JUSLIKEINMAHEROTICFANFICTION

2,000 sub do you still upload?

12:29 we truly live in a society

I prefer when it's explained in a whole-wheat way.

Ok ok ok! So not advertising! I just want to see if I made this story any better, I had to do a book report on a story and I chose this one, but I hate book reports so I made it into a short film instead! Please watch it and tell me if I did any better than the original story. Its on my youtube channel so I'm not gonna link it because people hate that. I have the same problems with this story and I tried to make it better! Please tell me if I did well!

Can you please do a rant on MrCreepyPasta soon?

@johnoconnell5004

3 жыл бұрын

@@katelynthewhitewerewolf6376 Okay.

Did someone else see Bo Burnham somewhere in the video too?

Lol Za Warudo In The Thumbnail

i have personally read this story and i have to say . i couldn't have said it better myself

Little does the girl named Natalie know, the Thievius Raccoonus doesn't create great Thieves, it takes great Thieves to create the Thievius Raccoonus!

@katelynthewhitewerewolf6376

2 жыл бұрын

Blackheartzero Enough Sly Cooper it ends here I'll finish you like I finished your father then the Cooper line will be erased and the only master thief will be Clockwerk.

CRAWLING IN MY CRAWL. THESE CRAWLS THEY WILL NOT CRAWL.

Was that article real?

I'm kinda thinking Sinya Sonya is better than Clockwork and it's a ripoff too🙄

@who_the_fuck_is_riley5813

6 жыл бұрын

Mr. Bunny Kirishima its not really any good either honestly

@Egalitariat-likesecretariat

6 жыл бұрын

Nnnnnnnnno? Clockwork is horribly bad, but at the very least it was... not dragging the Slender Man into this. Or making people proxies. Or pretending Sonya was both normal looking and beautiful and everyone made fun of her beautiful singing voice because they were _sooooo, like, jealous._ Clockwork was deeply uncomfortable and mind-numbingly boring and not scary at all and unrealistic and physics-defying and basically stupid in everything it tried to do, but it _tried._ There was basic general consistency and an attempt at theming, at least. I don't get that from Silent Sonya.

You should compare a shitty lost episode pasta with Candle Cove, and talk about what Candle Cove does right and the other does wrong.

@FishStickOnAStick

8 жыл бұрын

I'll definitely be discussing Candle Cove whenever I wind up discussing anything like Squidwards Suicide or Happy Appy

@Persephone01

7 жыл бұрын

I do like Candle Cove but there are some errors in that story, I would also recommend to you to view the Tv series that they made based on the Candle Cove story, its called Chanel Zero.

BUT WHO WAS PHONE

to me creepy pastas are like a test the review is Grading the test almost every single student IS FAILING Jeff F ClockWork D The real chucky cheese F- Candle Cove B- squidwards suicide D+ First test second test Sonic F- F ticci Toby D- Herobine B+ Ticci Toby D- 666 F- slender C-

Clockwork is terrible, but I still think Jeff the Killer is worst. At least Clockwork has a theme beyond "killer" that makes her a little less boring. It's not a well-handed theme, but the standards were low to begin with, so...

The scariest thing about this jeff the killer ripoff is the horrible infection she must have gotten by sticking a dirty clock into her eye

fuck, that dad was dead than who was on the phone scared THE FUCK OUT OF ME!!!!!!!! fuck

That awful design...God,even Terry's more scary

She pulled a Point Man

I really hate when people say "OMG ticci toby x clockwork!". People only really ship them because she has a clock in her eye and toby has the name "ticci toby"

@xcocolattex9121

5 жыл бұрын

Um people ship Clockwork and Toby because they're both 17, they both grew up with an abusive dad and both the creators of Toby and Clockwork said that the both of them are together.

@Expressionlesscorpse

5 жыл бұрын

Angel Darling no they are not

@Expressionlesscorpse

4 жыл бұрын

xcocolattex they are not you bitch

@ttpbroadcastingcompany.4460

2 жыл бұрын

It figures that a Gachaian abomination wouldn't do their research. Both of their creators agreed that the two are dating. I haven't the foggiest clue why you all hate the idea of Clockwork getting together with Toby.

I hate clockwork more than any other creepypasta

Is it okay to ask you to cover Sonic.exe?

@FishStickOnAStick

8 жыл бұрын

Don't worry, I'm working on it right now.

ZA WARUDO

If I remade the story, I'd make Clockwork a normal person. Her family was just like what you'd see in any given, normal, home. The father is an understandable asshole, the mother is trying her best to help the family out, and the brother isn't a fucking rapist creep. As the time goes on, Natalee goes through life and is going crazy because school is pretty much a hellhole. Through bullying and the fact that no one can do anything about it because of the fact that the bullies are seen as "good kids" to the adults. One day, as Natale is going through the emotions in her room, her thoughts get dark and darker still. But, the dark thoughts ONLY start a while AFTER the bullies and other characters are established. Natale, being a teenager, believes this to be normal, because being edgy and angry at shit is normal in people. One day, as she is talking to her stuffed giraffe, the dark thoughts grow louder and louder. Eventually, the bullying goes from bad to worst and when Natale is in her room, the dark thoughts engalfe her and the next day, she brings her giraffe and a knife to school. She waits in the bathroom and the bullies come in. She immediately corners them and stabs them to death, leaving one alive and making it look like it was the last bully. Back at home, she realizes that she killed a few people and was trying to justify it. Eventually, she tries to bring herself in, but she can't make herself do it. She eventually loses her mind some time later and she eventually starts killing people who, in her eyes, deserves it. Each death is at a certain time, and every time, she has her toy giraffe with her. Eventually, she realizes that the giraffe is a demon and she can't do anything about her predicament and she is now a killer, without her wanting to not be a killer. Hell, that would be slightly better than what we got.

@atanaZion

2 жыл бұрын

Basically Jeff the Killer

@katelynthewhitewerewolf6376

Жыл бұрын

​@@atanaZion Jeff would be mad his story got copied like lol

I feel ashamed, cause i am pretty sure Clockwork takes place in the same place i live

@IkaMusume813

7 жыл бұрын

Johannes The Traitor I am also ashamed because once I was younger and I liked this once. Then i got into Jojo.