This book starts out with an ancient Human ship called the Promethius coming up to an alien scrapyard looking for supplies. This story is disjointed. The first part has nothing to do with the second part and the third part has nothing to do with the third part. In the second part they discover an ancient alien relic called the Nexus which they destroy. Then all of a sudden, a third part of this books opens up with the crew of this ship discovering the Nexus all over again. The title of this story is great click bait but is so disjointed it leaves you very dissatisfied and unhappy.

@slinger6966

2 ай бұрын

Continue the book. Lets see if the writer can pull it together.

@KyuubiYoru

2 ай бұрын

This story feels very AI generated...

@Kaliburz

2 ай бұрын

There are definite holes....

The story goes all over the place with events and conclusive happenings going on w/o connecting situations. Character changes are drastic and go from male to female or the main characters change. It'd be helpful to flesh out and outline the story you want to tell, and the characters next, and then write.

@Kaliburz

2 ай бұрын

It's like same characters but different situations that may or may not be connected....

Raven went female to male.

@DEATH-THE-GOAT

3 ай бұрын

What did you expect? We live in time of trans ppl and birds

@zeehero7280

2 ай бұрын

@@DEATH-THE-GOATLOL! but trans people don't exist. the fact the term "trans" exists means they know this too, that a man cannot become a woman or vice versa, it's impossible no matter how mutilated you are.

@philliptaylor8270

2 ай бұрын

Yes, I had to laugh at this as well

man I'm loving your short story's A.I gen or not still cool...

Love the stories, really opens the imagination.

nice story I was glue to youtube..

Great story.

I love your stories

Very cool sci-fi story bro.

Thanks a lot

I like the story, subbed ofcourse.

i like the story; thanks

I like the van siting there inf ornt of the spoaceship, very realistic and immersive.

just keep writing, you will get better with each story and new idea. you rekindled my interest in reading syfy last series i read was author David Weber and his honor Harrington series, he co wrote other books and solo .

I liked the story.

as an emissary of the guardians of the Black Sun I liked this story

I enjoy the narration. Good storyline.

Good story

I liked the story, but needs a part 2.

O M G!!! Another evil alien name with Z........

I liked the story and will ❤ every story

I enjoyed the story, bring me more

Story from other world ❤

I liked it.

I Like the story especially the A.I. part!

I LIKED THE STORY ❤

I feel like I totally lost track with all the holes in this story..

What happened to the original crew? I thought the nexus was destroyed in the pocket dimension in the wormhole? How did zix leave the Prometheus and get onto Kargoths ship? I became more confused as the story went on.

Kinda a sudden change about 1/2 way thought

Liked that

i liked the story , yeah, it's fine to do 2 hour casts, quite interesting

I love the way his knuckles always white, way over used. LOL

Like the story❤❤❤❤

I liked the story want more

You paint great detail in your writing. I thoroughly enjoyed listening. Doing things like this without a pro editor can be difficult and I’m not sure if you used one. The editor would help you organize your story a bit better. Just a suggestion, as I listened till the end and that’s feedback in itself. Good luck.

@dirkaminimo4836

2 ай бұрын

Sorry. I forgot to mention that there are far too many ads. It interupts the story and I almost bailed cuz of it. I will do so if same thing happens with your new stories….

I like the story.

Where can I find the original text to just read it?

For Terra!

Once again the hot butter is sliced by a knife.

This started out quite interesting but devolved the longer it went on. A real bummer.

Loved the story does it have a name and are there more episodes?

The story was pretty cool

I like the story

What a weirdly generated story. So many oddities and inconsistencies.

@jonathanmutele4128

3 ай бұрын

gareed especially when the ai orion asks for help fighting off zix and the minions sent by kraggoth and suddenly 2 seconds later they all decide to fight kraggoth zix joinin their side how

@philliptaylor8270

2 ай бұрын

It's all true......

good story is there a follow up to this one

I like the story and the series. Probably A.I. written but not bad.

Source?

Although I agree with the other comment(s) here regarding the audio being all over the place (I had to rewind to some parts) I hope if a book exists, it is in order. However, when it comes to the Nexus and if it is what it is described to be, perhaps it resets reality if destroyed or tampered with, that is the only thing I can think of which makes sense in finding it a second time! Just my thoughts.

This story has plot holes in the plot holes of plot holes.

Would a scrap yard be more stable or less stable in relation to gravity?

@rohncarver3585

3 ай бұрын

probably less stable if you get something with a high enough density

Where is the rest?

bro how many times they going to find the nexus and destroy it

What happened to Zeph, Axel and the human crew?

What is the title please?

Zorgons😂 are everywhere. I am tired of Zorgans. Once I hear Zorgan, I know how the story is going to end😂. Same story boring. Just a few variations all end the same way😂. Zorgan!😂😂😂😂😂

This story had potential, but has numerous problems to a point where I eventually gave up on it. The following is intended as constructive criticism pointing out areas to try to improve in future writing, not as an attack, and I hope you'll accept it as such. The early part of the story really needed an explanation of how the situation came to be the way it is, with humanity having developed better technology than anyone else would possess hundreds of years later and then having collapsed with seemingly little left. On its face, such a situation appears wildly implausible, and what I read of the story does essentially nothing to overcome the implausibility. The characters and factions have virtually no depth, and the story does not provide anything resembling adequate information about the broader political situation that shapes what options are available to the characters. The plot veers back and forth too many times instead of settling toward a coherent direction or theme. The fight scenes are not well thought out, with some of them giving an impression of bad enough odds to require what feels like seriously excessive use of plot armor. The story wastes a lot of words in ways that appear to me like they are intended more to manipulate readers' reactions than to actually tell the story. One aspect of this issue is that depicting characters thinking about the importance of concerns or possibilities generally serves little purpose if the importance was already clear and the characters' thoughts are not described with sufficient depth or complexity to provide information with significant value for understanding situations or motivations better.

What fall?

@DEATH-THE-GOAT

3 ай бұрын

Autumn? 😉

@Spartan-qp7nh

2 ай бұрын

I'm guessing the fall of humanity

38:07 i agree with Raven i mean seriously sometimes war is not the answer but this isn't one of them times he was wanting to abandon his own I don't like this story lol not at all at this point anyway hopefully it gets better Zeph yelling we're not you're enemy after planning on abandoning his own race just to not fight back like the coward he his i know it won't get better so I'm not waisting my time with tgis zeph is the true enemy of the human race honestly

So when Raven was first mentioned it was a woman. Then as things progressed Raven is a man. Continuity is not held very well in this.

It left me behind. Like two different people were writing the story. Wasted an hour.

but... the story starts out with the humans being so much more advanced, why are they not using the more advanced tech to get what they need??? very confusing !!! great premis, but very disjointed delivery

I liked the story but straight up will only thumb up them man/woman 😂

WTF, raven starts as a woman and suddenly they are a man ???? come on, giant mistakes like that arent cool.

"Whatever the cost" is way over used...

It’s a string of short stories not so good. Probably the creation of ai. Crap really.

Rather disjointed story line, hops from one scenario to another without any adjustments.

Nothing bothers me more than contradiction, plot holes and plot manipulation. Chara terse changing sex spontaneously, disappearance of the main story's characters. This story is garbage! Senseless occurances these AI generated stories are useless. I refuse to allows AI generated stories to degrade humanity's ever loose ing grip on writing and Grammer skills, creative exploration and talent by accepting this trash at all! I hope that this channel covers more human generated stories and less AI crap like this!

Horrible! Jumps to different timelines without finishing the current story. So many inconsistencies and things that need explaining. Raven went from being a woman to being a man. Supposedly had a crew of 50,000 yet acts like the outcome depends on the actions of three people. Went from negotiating peace and taking the fight to the source to the ship being abandoned and no trace of the crew. The shapeshifter changes into a human right in front of the other aliens that specifically don't trust humans and they immediately form an alliance on the spot. Ziggs all of a sudden decides to betray his master because of why now?The Prometheus is this giant super carrier with hidden labs and armories yet it can land anywhere apparently and transform it's hull and hallways? The beginning mission is completely stupid. A data drive containing information that the Prometheus was part of a fleet...duh. What about the Icarus? It had tech lightyears ahead of Prometheus yet they don't care about that. They want a corrupted data drive that tells them jack shit. Bad storytelling, bad editing, it's all thrown together lazily. Could've been awesome but wtf happened to the crew and wtf happened with humanity? Never explains that. Just pisses me off lol

Your tale has good bones but is marred by the jarring lack of continuity. What happened to the Prometheus' human crew? Why do characters change genders and basic motivations? The spelling of names change randomly. And there's the change in the last few minutes from third to first person. Perhaps this tale would be better off broken into chapters - but if you do, be careful to proofread your product and maintain continuity lest the listener decide that you're just wasting their time and move on.

A good story poorly written, hurriedly written and poorly organized.

i like the story