STEM Statement of Purpose: UCLA Masters in Environmental Engineering (admitted student example 2020)

Applying to grad school? I read a statement of purpose from a student admitted to UCLA's Masters in Environmental Engineering program and go over common mistakes I see when reading STEM graduate school essays.
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00:00 What we will cover
00:36 Reading intro to Engineering Statement of Purpose
1:12 What makes a great intro paragraph for a STEM Statement of Purpose
1:39 Reading second paragraph - how to show leadership
2:18 How to write a reflective paragraph
2:45 Reading 3rd-4th paragraph - Describing values
4:02 How to add in your unique point of view to the field
5:17 Reading conclusion paragraph - bringing it back to why this school and grad program
6:09 Summarizing what makes this a great statement of purpose for engineering

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  • @LaurenValdez
    @LaurenValdez3 жыл бұрын

    Vote on what my next video should focus on? Put your answer in the comments: A) How to overcome a low GPA B) Before and after STEM Statement of Purpose C) STEM Personal Statement D) Other - tell me what you'd like to see

  • @skylerkriese8729

    @skylerkriese8729

    3 жыл бұрын

    B!

  • @vedantmodak949

    @vedantmodak949

    3 жыл бұрын

    C

  • @xiaokewang308

    @xiaokewang308

    3 жыл бұрын

    A! really pain point!

  • @wenanyaugustine3311

    @wenanyaugustine3311

    2 жыл бұрын

    B

  • @naut_nigel

    @naut_nigel

    Жыл бұрын

    A

  • @vedantmodak949
    @vedantmodak9493 жыл бұрын

    Applying for a similar program (Energy Systems). Good to know I'm on the right track to writing my SoP. All thanks to you Lauren, these videos are the GOLD standard.

  • @LaurenValdez

    @LaurenValdez

    3 жыл бұрын

    Thank you! Make sure to subscribe and if you are on my email list you will be the first to know about new resources. landing.mailerlite.com/webforms/landing/i0p4x3

  • @alejandralinares8826
    @alejandralinares88263 жыл бұрын

    thankyou very much for this video, it really helps me a lot, I am in the process of writing my SOP and was having a hard time trying to inspire myself these last two days, watching your 7 min video inspires me more than any other videos on youtube, after watching it, I spend 30 min in front of my computer writing nonstop, I am less stress about my SOP and I really feel I can do it. THANK YOU VERY MUCH ...love you

  • @LaurenValdez

    @LaurenValdez

    3 жыл бұрын

    You can do it! Thank you for watching. Make sure to subscribe and if you are on my email list you will be the first to know about new resources. landing.mailerlite.com/webforms/landing/i0p4x3

  • @robertomanrique8004
    @robertomanrique80043 жыл бұрын

    Thank you so much, It help me a lot!.

  • @evangelinewang8034
    @evangelinewang80343 жыл бұрын

    Your videos really help a lot. Thank you ma'am!

  • @LaurenValdez

    @LaurenValdez

    3 жыл бұрын

    You are welcome! Make sure to subscribe and if you are on my email list you will be the first to know about new resources. landing.mailerlite.com/webforms/landing/i0p4x3

  • @joeK2123
    @joeK21233 жыл бұрын

    Thank you for sharing this. Such a helpful reference to write my own

  • @LaurenValdez

    @LaurenValdez

    3 жыл бұрын

    You're so welcome!

  • @rickycheema7879
    @rickycheema78793 жыл бұрын

    Thank you that really helped

  • @LaurenValdez

    @LaurenValdez

    3 жыл бұрын

    Thank you! Make sure to subscribe and if you are on my email list you will be the first to know about new resources. landing.mailerlite.com/webforms/landing/i0p4x3

  • @chaarupuniani745
    @chaarupuniani7453 жыл бұрын

    this was very helpful! thank you!

  • @LaurenValdez

    @LaurenValdez

    3 жыл бұрын

    You are welcome!

  • @LaurenValdez

    @LaurenValdez

    3 жыл бұрын

    Also Make sure to subscribe and if you are on my email list you will be the first to know about new resources. landing.mailerlite.com/webforms/landing/i0p4x3

  • @SapnaJain525
    @SapnaJain5253 жыл бұрын

    Hi Lauren, can you SOP videos for MS in Regulatory affairs program too. It would be a great favour.

  • @brunacosta2475
    @brunacosta24753 жыл бұрын

    Lauren, I would love to see a 500 word SOP for a PhD program. Thanks

  • @LaurenValdez

    @LaurenValdez

    3 жыл бұрын

    Great I'll check in with some friends about finding one.

  • @jerryisa8849

    @jerryisa8849

    2 жыл бұрын

    I will love to see one as well

  • @urushathapa7585
    @urushathapa75852 жыл бұрын

    thank you so much for reading a statement. This is really helpful. Some schools have an option to include an optional essay. Would it be possible to talk about low GRE score or low GPA or any other weak areas of the application? Some top schools also ask to include extracurricular activities not on the statement but on the application. Should it be related to ones studies? I am glad I found you on youtube. ☺

  • @ahmedbaruwa8433
    @ahmedbaruwa84333 жыл бұрын

    Great Video !!!

  • @LaurenValdez

    @LaurenValdez

    3 жыл бұрын

    Thank you! Make sure to subscribe and if you are on my email list you will be the first to know about new resources. landing.mailerlite.com/webforms/landing/i0p4x3

  • @skmdibrahimkhalilullah9097
    @skmdibrahimkhalilullah90973 жыл бұрын

    Please make a video on 'How to overcome a low GPA' . Would love to hear it from you

  • @BlueUKLouis
    @BlueUKLouis3 жыл бұрын

    EXCELLENT!

  • @LaurenValdez

    @LaurenValdez

    3 жыл бұрын

    Thank you for watching! Make sure to subscribe and if you are on my email list you will be the first to know about new resources. landing.mailerlite.com/webforms/landing/i0p4x3

  • @niraj_was_here
    @niraj_was_here3 жыл бұрын

    You're doing great work. I wish you'll get more views soon

  • @LaurenValdez

    @LaurenValdez

    3 жыл бұрын

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  • @christopherho8015
    @christopherho80153 жыл бұрын

    An extraordinarily helpful video. Just one question, for the SOP you have just shown to us, does it come with a prompt?

  • @LaurenValdez

    @LaurenValdez

    3 жыл бұрын

    You can find it if you google the program for environmental engineering at UCLA

  • @musferakhan7551
    @musferakhan75513 жыл бұрын

    Hi Lauren, love your videos! They've been very helpful. I'm wondering what to do in the case that a program only asks for one essay (SOP or personal statement). Would it be best to combine the contents of both, like academic interests/experience + personal history into one? Thank you!

  • @LaurenValdez

    @LaurenValdez

    3 жыл бұрын

    I think the best thing to do is choose one or the other. I think if you skew the lines that separate them, it might just seem like a weak version of one, as opposed to a combination of both. Make sure to subscribe and if you are on my email list you will be the first to know about new resources. landing.mailerlite.com/webforms/landing/i0p4x3

  • @AbdullahHayatKhan
    @AbdullahHayatKhan2 жыл бұрын

    Can I get a sample of personal statement I want to pursue MS in Environmental Engineering

  • @srirams785
    @srirams7853 жыл бұрын

    First of all I want to appreciate you , because you providing so much valuable information . If it possible can you provide sample sops for cs programs.

  • @LaurenValdez

    @LaurenValdez

    3 жыл бұрын

    I've reviewed a few people's essays this year for CS programs but I haven't yet heard where they got in, so I'm not sure I'll have any CS examples anytime soon.

  • @srirams785

    @srirams785

    3 жыл бұрын

    @@LaurenValdez if you have any sample sop can you send in email please. Sriramnaidu508@gmail.com

  • @srirams785

    @srirams785

    3 жыл бұрын

    @@LaurenValdez I have one sample sop, but it is not in proper way. So, if you have any sample sop please share

  • @srirams785

    @srirams785

    3 жыл бұрын

    @@LaurenValdez Hi Lauren , I have written sop for cs , but it is not up to mark.Based on my sop only they will consider my profile , so if you have sample cs sop means please share it .

  • @oyinkansolaoladapo5265
    @oyinkansolaoladapo52653 жыл бұрын

    Hi Lauren, thank you for this! Just one question, do you have to cite statistics included in an SOP or a PS?

  • @LaurenValdez

    @LaurenValdez

    3 жыл бұрын

    You can but it doesn't have to be formal citations

  • @oyinkansolaoladapo5265

    @oyinkansolaoladapo5265

    3 жыл бұрын

    @@LaurenValdez Would be bad if I didn't though? especially for a PS that is 500 words. I'm already on 499 words lol

  • @LaurenValdez

    @LaurenValdez

    3 жыл бұрын

    @@oyinkansolaoladapo5265 No you don't need to cite

  • @vozza14
    @vozza143 жыл бұрын

    wish i saw this sooner... im gonna have to re-write everything

  • @LaurenValdez

    @LaurenValdez

    3 жыл бұрын

    That is okay! Sometimes it is an important pre-writing tool to get ideas down. Thank you for watching. Make sure to subscribe and if you are on my email list you will be the first to know about new resources. landing.mailerlite.com/webforms/landing/i0p4x3

  • @yashk1964
    @yashk19643 жыл бұрын

    Hi Lauren! I'm a chemical engineer with two years of experience but I don't think I have anything to write the way this SOP is written. I don't have any aspirations to solve world hunger, poverty, etc. I'm simply pursuing master's to be more competitive in the job market. What do I do in that case?

  • @LaurenValdez

    @LaurenValdez

    3 жыл бұрын

    You don't necessarily need a big aspiration, but you do need to make yourself stand out. I encourage you to be as specific and niche as possible. For example, it there a particular technology or innovation that you want to dive into deeper and be the leader in? For example, I've seen someone doing a Ph.D in physics who was interested in pursuing a very particular form of math that she wants to apply to her physics research in a way that is very innovative. You can also highlight your work experience. Is there a big project you worked on that had many challenges you had to overcome or where you were able to demonstrate leadership, innovation, improved results, etc.? This is also a great question to bring to office hours where we can talk more specifically about your experience and discuss what a good approach might look like.

  • @beyonddoodles4236
    @beyonddoodles42363 жыл бұрын

    Thanks for the video that was sooo helpful! I have a doubt: Do you think its a good idea to talk about my future goals that are not 100% supported by the department research faculty but i know that the concepts i will learn with the faculty at their lab will help me achieve my goals. What i mean to say is: Say the department focuses on experimental research without thinking about where the applications lie- they don’t talk about the industry i wanna get into (future goals) but i know that these concepts will be useful there

  • @LaurenValdez

    @LaurenValdez

    3 жыл бұрын

    If those goals are important to you, then write about them. That can be part of what makes you unique adn stand out. However you want to discuss how the school will help you achieve those goals. You might even be able to cross-list courses from other departments as a way to get access to resources from across campus.

  • @beyonddoodles4236

    @beyonddoodles4236

    3 жыл бұрын

    @@LaurenValdez that’s so helpful thank you so much!

  • @beyonddoodles4236

    @beyonddoodles4236

    3 жыл бұрын

    I was just scared they would feel i should be applying for some other program instead if my industrial application is matching another engineering program

  • @LaurenValdez

    @LaurenValdez

    3 жыл бұрын

    @@beyonddoodles4236 Just make sure to make a case for why that program. If it's not clear for you or them how the program supports your goals, then you shouldn't be applying there.

  • @beyonddoodles4236

    @beyonddoodles4236

    3 жыл бұрын

    @@LaurenValdez got it! Thank you so much! Your videos really helped me clarify how to demonstrates relevant skills through not the most relevant experiences!

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