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Making the unobtanium valuable to Jake is my favorite part of this. Making him choose between something he wants and something he needs... *chef's kiss*

I love the "I fixed" series since it gives a new perspective on "bad movies." Instead of just saying a movie was bad or wasted potential Tyler actually shows how it can be improved which takes a lot more work than just pointing at the bad stuff in a movie.

@dioalfonso

Жыл бұрын

avatar is good tho, but yeah the characters are it's biggets problem.

@mickthetic

11 ай бұрын

You are embarrassingly arrogant

holy shit, just the unobtanium change opens up the story to so much more depth. Nice work

In the film, they have a line “If Grace is there with you -- look in her memories -- she can show you the world we come from. There's no green there. They killed their Mother, and they're gonna do the same thing here.” I think this highlights the main philosophy a bit better. I think in order to capture the magic that the original script has, then the pacing for this one needs to really take time to hone in on the worldbuilding, because I think that the worldbuilding can offer a deeper empathy for not just the people but the forest, the foresr spirits, the forest life and the Mother Tree, as if Pandora is a character in its own right- like a mother IS home to her child.

The marine was promised new legs in the original story (hangar scene). So that personal dilemma already existed. But I agree the theme was a bit weak in the finally. Since he cared a lot about his avatar, his legs were not a big issue anymore for him. It was resolved when he married.

In one single video I have learned so much about structuring a screenplay in a proper manner than in 20 years! Thank you so much for

I only watched just 8 mins of this clip and I loved it!!! I've seen a lot of criticism of Avatar but they all feel like shouting of dislike not a legitimate criticisms.... You explained the story and criticized at same time while sounding sane all the way through.... Great work!!!

This is a great retake on the Avatar story. However, you must recall the irony in the story's premise. A crippled man gets to have legs in the Avatar world! So giving Unobtanium healing powers only makes it less of a dilemma, because Jake wins both ways. Plus, he gets to have a shot at starting life again in this new world with legs compared to the old. So creating a dilemma for him is really difficult, except maybe bringing his brother back to life!

Very good! I think the story could be even better if instead of his legs not working, Jake has a terminal disease and is terrified of death. Maybe most people in the avatar project are in a similar situation, some short of "nothing left to lose" mental state. It would make his sacrifice all the more personal in the end, although it might bring up the debate that he is choosing the life of the natives over the lives of his own species

Hm, I think in your version of the story, it would fit even better thematically if the unobtanium wasnt a mineral, but was instead a substance _in the trees._ It gives a bit more credibility to the outright magical properties it has in your version, and also _forces_ humans to destroy the local ecosystem in order to get the unobtanium (unlike the mineral, you can't extract it via less destructive means), making it more impossible to humans and navi to cooperate and coexist peacefully even with the best of intentions. And, naturally, the biggest source of the resource is in that humongous tree the tribe lives in. And lets say that humans can't simply farm the trees because they require extraordinary amounts of time to grow and begin amassing unobtanium (Say, a thousand years), while humans need it _right now._

@midnightnebulastar6826

Жыл бұрын

omg this wld be a rlly good way to further emphasize the importance of the pandora ecosystem, not bad

your version of unobtanium and Toruk sounds too MAGICAL to me.

Just rewatched Avatar and I must say it was better than I remembered. It delivers its emotional beats very well. I do agree some of the characters are a bit simple. But other than not having much depth to them I don’t think it hurts the actual story too much. I completely agree with the fact that Jake get’s taken in to the tribe too easily, even though I think the floating plant seeds being attracted to him foreshadowing his ‘pure heart’ is a great idea in the film. But it does eliminate the possibility of a bit more tension and build-up. I think some of your ideas are very good, especially the ones adding more tension (and resolution) between him and Tsu Tey/the other navi. Also increasing his conflict by potentially having the cure for his legs be the very unobtanium itself. I think Jake as a character is very well designed to fit the story as is. Him being in a wheelchair really adds contrast to the freedom he experiences in his avatar. Also him being an ex marine and having lost his goal and drive. To have Jake be someone who is eager to explore new worlds I’m not so sure of. I think the fact that he doesn’t really care much for it initially really adds to his journey in discovering and understanding this new world. Making it all the more interesting. Another great idea is having Jake not be accepted by the Navi before the battle scenes. Having him fight for them even when they want nothing to do with him reinforces his genuine motivation. Especially if this ultimately means his own death. Which also flips his first belief of wanting to do anything in order to get the unobtanium and cure his legs. I still find it very difficult to say one idea is objectively better than another though, since these things don’t just add up but can also diminish other parts of the film. Either way I think it all proves how hard of a juggling act it is to tell a great story.

Thanks for all the help with script writing. It’s helping me work on a musical with friends

WOW! SUPER SECERT VIDEO?! oh my gosh I am excited, I am the first like and comment on this video. Tyler you are a writing beast keep up the good work and may god bless you.

@TylerMowery

Жыл бұрын

Haha you found it! It's not supposed to go public until tomorrow! Good find!

I really love these videos. I don’t write screenplays but novels and this has helped tremendously. Thank you and don’t stop please. I need these. Lol.

Thank you so much, Tyler. Each video you make means the world to us. We're super glad to have such a fantastic mentor like you.

Can you do one with “Morbius”? I think it would be interesting if you identified issues of not just a weak or mediocre but a horrible film.

@danielpayne4609

Жыл бұрын

No one can fix Morbius!!!!

@SDhruvPandey

Жыл бұрын

why are you saying that it needs to be fixed it's one of the best movies of the era

07:14 - Havent seen the film in a while, but I really disagree: Jake doesn’t just ‘take’ Neytiri - they fall in love. It’s a mutual thing. And he doesn’t just take the place of clan leader - that’s something he earns by leading the defence against the humans, and through his selfless fighting. And you compare this behaviour to slaughtering navii and destroying the natural environment? It’s easy to see how the second thing is ‘taking’ but how is the first thing? That said, I agree the film has a ‘white saviour’ trope going on, and I think your video really improved the philosophical conflict and the characters. Also, I love your videos and keep doing what you do! 😄

@justanothervoice2538

Жыл бұрын

Thank you, I just commented the same thing. Jake tell Nyteri he won’t choose her unless she chooses him and he doesn’t usurp leadership from Tsutae, only offers to help with his understanding of the humans’ tactics if they will accept him.

@katherinealvarez9216

Жыл бұрын

Thank you.

This is awesome. I love these "fixed it" videos. Keep em coming!

i love this series man!! please continue.

I really hate the idea of "fixing" someone else's work. It's a done work with hundreds of sweat and tears. You can think of an alternate version of the film, but don't call it "fixed" version. Its such a pretentious way to put it. Yeah Avatar had flaws but so does any other movies out there. James Cameron is one of the most well known movie director/screen writer out there for a reason.

@sullyfox4993

Жыл бұрын

Yeah, everything can be improved with a bit of hindsight, but to think something needs to be "fixed" because they didn't understand it is silly. From a purely artistic standpoint, everything is perfect and broken all at once. It's subjective. This guy has a lot of interesting insights into scriptwriting, but until his face is up on IMDB, he might should focus more on his own writing and leave everyone else's to the professionals.

@harrydunkwu7655

Жыл бұрын

@@sullyfox4993 Exactly what I say every time I watch his videos! I've got a lot of respect for his views, but it's easy to "fix" people's stuff while being an unknown name. Still waiting to see Tyler's written work in the box office.

Tyler, please check out a movie called "Vietnam Colony". It's an Indian movie from the Malayalam film industry released in 1992 and it's a Drama/Comedy genre movie. The whole core story structure of this movie is pretty similar to Avatar. I don't know if James Cameron is inspired by Vietnam colony or not, but it's surely an interesting thing for you to check it out. Btw Great Video!

Comparing Jake to the other humans disregards how Neytiri and the Na’vi welcomed him at the beginning, rather than how the other humans did it - I think this is a fundamental difference that you ignored in the breakdown

@LukeLovesRose

Жыл бұрын

He doesnt care enough

@MrEffectfilms

Жыл бұрын

@@LukeLovesRose he cared enough to humbly beg for help and guidance to a goddess he wasn't even sure was real. He cared enough to risk his life taming one of the most legendary creatures of this world just so the Navi would hear him out. Sounds like he cared plenty to me.

I do like your version, but I think you’re kind of reaching to make problems out of some elements of the original, particularly with Jake’s character. You make it sound like he’s deliberately stealing Nyteri from Tsutae and usurping rule of the clan because he wants those things. But the film makes it clear he has no intention of taking anything at the cost of others. He tells Nyteri that he won’t choose her as his mate unless she first chooses him, and he never tries to take over the clan from Tsutae, only offering to help the people with his knowledge of the humans’ tactics and technology if Tsutae will accept him. And he is adopted in by the people, it’s not like he declares himself one of them. Again, I like a lot of things you did, but it occasionally felt you were going to great lengths to construe problems out of the original.

@D0GBOOT

Жыл бұрын

I agree with this. I didn't like the claims that Jake 'took' Nyteri or 'stole Tsutae's woman', as this feels fairly misogynistic, implying that Nyteri has no agency and is a possession of the clan, rather than an individual in her own right.

@enigmawstudios4130

Жыл бұрын

Has nothing to do with being misogynistic, as this could easily be said and done in the reverse. The issue is the lack of depth.

@tonydanatop4912

Жыл бұрын

Yeah he was never really malicious or selfish the plot just conspired to make him more important than he ought to have been.

Not saying you're wrong here, but there's another, "quicker" way to fix "Avatar". First, I have to say the man-hours they all put in is overwhelming. The basic premise is Jake Sully as a Marine lost the use of his legs. His brother died, and so Jake took his place. Simple change: make the story about "belonging" for Jake. Suppose When Jake came home, his brother took care of him, or at least was going to until the date he left for "Pandora". Then he dies. [I have a twin sister]. Jake takes his place. Maybe he can find a place of "belonging" taking over for his brother. The military man, the capitalist and the scientist then take on different roles. Jake Sully when he first arrives fits in with the military man, that's what he knows. "Belonging" looks like at first to Jake like, "I'm home, doing what I was trained to do." The scientist takes him out into the jungle and he gets lost. Then the Na'vi decide to train him because he's a "warrior" - "JakeSully". JakeSully finds himself falling in love with Nat'ir'i, and things begin to change for him as he realizes the "belonging" he wants, he's found only with the Na'vi. The scientist also goes through a character arc, though I don't know how much of that was Sigourney Weaver. Look, James Cameron didn't turn every single military person bad.

I enjoyed it, the whole thing! Great format:)

Your work amazes me.

There is a big plot hole in your version. Jake can get his real leg back if he helps humans to extract unobtanium. What will happen if he doesn't? He will get to live in a Navi body which is taller, stronger and most importantly has legs. So if he teams up with Navi he can live better on a greener and more beautiful planet as a King with a girlfriend. So obviously he will choose the Navi life. So, there is no dilemma.

@Felix-mp2vj

Жыл бұрын

That's not the case. He knows for sure that humans army is stronger than Navi's. But with the fact that he choses to team up with them even thought he knows he can walk again as a human if they take that mineral from Pandora, it makes the protagonist's choise stronger...

Damn, this was really good! Would’ve loved to seen this version 🔥

I think these changes were excellent offers. The unobtanium one is great too, but I also like like how the clan would challenge Jake to prove he didn't think in a human way anymore, very interesting! One remark I would make: he didn't "take" Neytiri. She equally chose him, she had her own agency in picking Jake as her partner.

Yes another I fixed video!!!!!

This is so a Dan Harmon type structure..i love it♥

Great story revision 👏 ... you are of pure heart... signed by a member of the naive species

So much better! I feel like I watched an entire new movie 🎥 I will keep this narrative as my experience of watching Avatar lol

The thing is about unobtainium is that there is already a bit of a detailed explanation of why it is so important but it’s just that this piece of lore wasnt implemented fully in the movie. The Earth essentially is a dystopian place undergoing population issues, ecological chaos, resource issues and most importantly-an energy crisis. Unobtainium is valuable because is a key to solving the energy crisis and you could say that these people who have took the effort to go to Pandora to mine unobtainium are doing this to save lives back home as you mentioned. Now the whole conquer and explore thing makes sense with the colonel along with the main corporate guy you made him into a nice character but now im also thinking what if you spice things up even more by saying that these people have family members or people that they have connections with back home. So all this effort is to save them back home. But yeah I respect the ideas you managed to implement I’m just worried on how Jake’s death would affect the rest four future movies.

@LukeLovesRose

Жыл бұрын

There are more movies to come. I'm sure well find out about unobtainium

I really like these "I Fixed..." videos, keep them coming bro. I like how the new version gets rid of the "civilized savior" being the hero "noble savages" complex. Rather its about the outsider learning the beliefs of another culture and paying the ultimate price to be honored by that culture. Rather than the usual evil-westerners vs holy-natives things, it's more about different cultural differences. Or like you always say the Philosophical Conflict.

In act 1 I'm not convince with Jake and natiri connection.its too rush. Why she simply leave outsider without warning and return to see him again?? i'm not convice motives of nitiri with jake. why she allow him to come to see their tribes, without fully knowing him ?? And why she is most interested to teach Jake to learn their culture, she is strong,and smarter character.her priority should be in favor of tribes. Other than this I like the story.

@HarishAgastya

Жыл бұрын

because when Neytiri is about to kill jake the seed of sacred tree Eywa stops her. when he follows her the seeds of sacred tree lot of them sit on jakes body. so Neytiri may assumed that Jake is somebody important.

@akhonaluthuli5931

Жыл бұрын

She didn't wanna teach him.

By the way, the philosophical conflict, you prefer I can see it in the actual movie but the problem with that one I didn't understand at first is that Jake character doesnt like the way humans were living and was feeling a prisoner there and even at start of film the character was put in this AMBIGUOUS conflict between growth and harmony, where I think he is preferring harmony than growth which shows in that Jake character is flat arc, which makes it obvious to story and have seen many times in different characters, so your changes of Jake character is finally something new and unique, so great character building.

Amazing. Really. Bravo.

- Pandora should be the only place in the universe to get [unobtanium]. Up the stakes. Maybe we can find out the trees make the stuff. - Jake should’ve lost the use of his legs ON Pandora. Take us on the full journey. We start out HATING this brutal jungle where everything wants to kill you. Maybe he even lost his legs because Smurfette herself smacked him while the other Navi laughed at the puny human. When his C.O. sends him to puzzle out the key to defeating them, he is thrilled for payback.

Only watched the intro at this point: if unobtanium has the ability to conduct energy better than any material on Earth, wouldn't it be dramatic if, while all this is going on, scientists are trying to develop a way to rebuild broken human nervous systems with it. Therefore, if Jake allows the humans to exploit this new planet, he will be able to walk, naturally, as a human being again.

Wow! This is impressive you just made Avatar a much better movie and actual have a lot more sense than even the collector's edition.

hi tyler...exactly how much time it took complete this version of your screenplay ?

Can you please fix Sphere by Barry Levinson? I love the movie, but it could be even better. I think this Michael Crichton's novel adaptation is completely underated

Man, it's more than a little frustrating how easily that movie could have been so much better

22:48 - Wow. This line just made a goofy one-dimensional villain into something special.

Yes, one can give the characters and the story more details and nuance, but I don't think that is always required. Lord of the Rings for instance is very simplistic for instance in terms of its characters and the story.

@DarthBiomech

Жыл бұрын

It's also a fantasy.

@fredrikpettersson2972

Жыл бұрын

@@DarthBiomech True. And Avatar is science fiction. Regardless of genre, the same patterns exist in terms of story and characters.

@DarthBiomech

Жыл бұрын

@@fredrikpettersson2972 No? Fantasy can get away with this because it can lean into mythological archetypical stories with literal good, literal evil, prophecies, chosen ones, ETC. SciFi does not have such ability, its characters are supposed to be real people, not mythological figures.

@fredrikpettersson2972

Жыл бұрын

@@DarthBiomech Just because the story takes place in a futuristic sci-fi world doesn't mean that the same mythological archetypal stories are/must be absent. Sauron and Palpatine for instance are the same archetype of ultimate evil character that only seeks ultimate power. One is sci-fi the other is fantasy. So it's very easy to include the same mythological and archetypal themes and characters in any genre.

I was wondering if you could fix Jurassic World: Fallen Kingdom. I think the story had a good premise but just fell flat.

You want to go to war with James Cameron

@TomEyeTheSFMguy

Жыл бұрын

This is the killing of Rug Daniels.

@plbenton

Жыл бұрын

That sunuvabitch brought the war to us

How do u avoid copyright bro ?

Excellent

Holy shit just finished the video....bravo

Seems like Cameron took some of these ideas to heart with the McGuffin in Avatar 2

Great video.

I think that giving a legitimate reason for the humans to want to mine Unobtanium neuters the message of the movie, which is to point out that in the real capitalist world that we live in, all the extraction we've done has ultimately been only for the purpose of allowing for more extraction, at the cost of our own Pandora. James Cameron wasn't trying to make a movie that explores both sides of the issue of environmentalism, he was holding up a mirror to the insane world that we *actually* live in and saying "we need to fight against this". The name Unobtanium might be corny, but it's fitting in that the end goal of capital is unobtainable, no amount of exploitation will ever be able to satisfy its hunger.

@randomdude30

Жыл бұрын

Brilliantly put. Came down to the comments section to write just this, but you articulated it better. The capitalist world in order to maximize its profits while reducing input costs, is always on the lookout for cheap energy. The Industrial Revolution and the Internet Age were both made possible because of the availability of electricity. But humankind's need for energy is insatiable and cheap energy is the rate limiting factor of progress. This in itself fuels this need for energy at any cost. Least of them being the welfare of an alien species and their emotions. Even on Earth many indigenous tribes have been uprooted (clearing of forests) and relocated willy-nilly for the construction of dams and other hydroelectric projects. Cameron's philosophical question in Avatar is, at what point does this mad pursuit of 'progress' become unacceptable. What gives humanity the right to rape and pillage the resources of a planet for their personal gains? Avatar in it's current form poses this philosophical conflict beautifully and holds a mirror to human society. It also shows what a handful of people with relatively primitive technology, can achieve, powered by their courage of conviction. Also, James Cameron, apart from being a writer-director is also a Physics major and a scientist in his own right. He won't just randomly assign magical properties to Unobtanium as some kind of cure all for all of humankind's woes. Sorry Tyler I don't agree with your so called fix.

@cjkalandek996

Жыл бұрын

@McClunky @Random Dude Still doesn't change the fact that the messages of the movie were condescending, ham-fisted, and hypocritical.

@dotwarner17

Жыл бұрын

So why are you still living in this capitalist world, enjoying the fruits of its horrible extraction? If the exploitation, conquest, and destruction of the environment is, as you claim, a moral hazard, why haven't you taken the path to embrace harmony with nature and showing us that it is indeed the better way?

@lukefuller2005

Жыл бұрын

Cameron had made a $1 billion profit on a movie about how capitalism is big bad. Lmao

The Fixed version was good

Please fix Multiverse of Madness!!!

A lot of issues with the revised version as well.

Ya 👍

You should fix Nope! It's a great movie and a fun ride, but I can tell there are some major weak spots in the screenplay!

I'd reeeaaly like to see you fix ghost rider

I remember being genuinely shocked at how shallow the plot of this movie was. They went to so much effort to make this the biggest thing ever, and yet it seemed like they spent literally 5 minutes on the script. It's like they didn't even try.

There is nothing to fix. It's a James Cameron movie. You could never duplicate his attention to detail

Why not a series about "what can we learn from...?" How ti fix Is awesome but, although those probs, these films are so enjoyable...

Lol your version is so much better.

❤

The second movie could be about how Jake in his human form tries to integrate into NaVi tribe

Honestly I do think James could’ve improved the film if he consulted indigenous people about the script, and disabled people for jake. It would’ve been so much better if they had some variety in the script room.

Can you fix Transformers?

@cjkalandek996

Жыл бұрын

I feel like you'd have to REALLY re-write that to make it better. Like, a completely different story.

@xenofaart

Жыл бұрын

​@@cjkalandek996 i completely agree xD also, i would not choice this guy to fix it either.

I'll give this reworking a look but I still doubt I'll ever watch "Avatar" again. That whole mass slaughter set piece with the attack on the tree is way too intense and traumatizing for me. Fix that and I'll consider rewatching. Otherwise Cameron can go and you-know-what.

There's a lot of hate to the avatar story from people and if the story had been more like this it would've been a lot better but just because its simple doesn't mean it's a bad story

I never liked how jake told his Ikran, that it was his now ~ like ew!

i really feel like this movie wouldve been so much better if jake was the villain of the story

So… Atlantis

The first thing wrong with the story is that Cameron called the Mcguffin Unobtainium. That is just lazy writing and dumbing it down to the audience. I was insulted that he doesnt think the audience is amart.

Okay your argument about Jake "taking what he wants" is completely false. Jake did not take anything from anyone. He doesn't steal Nyterri from Tsutey he specifically says "I've already chosen but this woman MUST ALSO CHOOSE ME" if Nyterri had rejected his advances he would have let it go and been done with it. He mated with her because they both wanted each other not just him wanting her. Jake doesn't steal leadership of the clan away from Tsutey either. He leads the defense force against the humans because he's a former Marine, he likely has more combat experience against other live people than any of them, it'd be kinda stupid if he wasn't leading that fight. But more importantly Tsutey was always going to be clan leader, only reason Jake ended up with that position is because he died in fact there's even a deleted scene where Jake is with Tsutey in his final moments and he formally trusts Jake to lead and take care of their people. Finally, I'm sure Jake likely asked to use the tree to merge his mind with his avatar body, just because we don't see it doesn't mean it didn't happen. Not only that but I'm sure he earned the goddess Aewahs respect after he pleaded for help with leading the Navi in the final fight. Jake has nothing but respect for this world and it's people, think about what he says "If Grace is with you, look into her memories and see the world we come from. There's no green there, they killed their mother, and they're gonna do the same here. More sky people are going to come, like a rain that never ends....unless we stop them. You chose me for something, I will stand and fight.... you know I will, but I need a little help here" Nothing but an honest, humble plea for help and guidance. How can anyone think this is someone who takes whatever he wants? Overall that comment was extremely untrue and misleading. Avatar is a much better film than people give it credit for.

Just to clarify, Jake didn't take Natiri, she's an autonomous character in the story, not an object. All the other stuff sure.

I think I have a very interesting suggestion for the next "fixed" episode, and this may be a weird one to do but I think you should fix the hell out of Dhar Mann's "Girl Finds Out She's Adopted" (Very clunky title) It's literally just a cheap cash grab. I don't know how familiar you are with Dhar Mann but he seriously needs to chill out with his videos

8:00 your premise is wrong. Drawing a parallel between the big corporations motivations and lengths they will go to to get what they want with Jake is pretty disingenuous… I also don’t get why you had to mention his race but I’ll ignore that for now. Jake didn’t “Take” anything. He was let into the clan with guidance, followed that guidance and then had a change of heart to help the indigenous people.

@midnightnebulastar6826

Жыл бұрын

he mentioned the fact that jake is white bc of the white savior trope, a pretty problematic and overused trope

The way you phrase Jake's actions as "taking" is incorrect. Jake's integration into the Na'vi culture is only due to the permission of Eywa, the supernatural force that the Na'vi worship that is connected to every lifeform on their planet. He doesn't just force his way into it.

I dont think you understand the point of the movie or its characters. What's more, you clearly dont understand or appreciate the craftsmanship of James Cameron. Everything in a James Cameron film feels like a perfectly woven quilt. If you pull out one seam or two or three, it all falls apart

You lost me at 07:45

Is your version good? Yeah. I think in a lot of ways you made a more nuanced and interesting core theme... but eliminating the wish fulfillment aspect destroys a lot of the appeal of the movie. This isn't "highest grossing movie of all time" alterations. Avatar's love story is a key aspect of its identity. I'd like to see it preserved in any theoretical "fixed" version.

Tyler, I like your version more. Avatar was fun to watch, but the white savior trope was annoying. 😂

You fixed the highest grossing film ever…?

Presumably, Tyler, the motive the doctors shared doesn't mean much to you and those of similar dispositions do to complex factors, though factors which would lead to the invasion of such a world, a land, as this film depicted; as our own history has depicted. It's safe to say, in story, if their were three sides to a protest of these off world excavations, that their would be: one who was for, one against, and one neutral. Where would you fall in this? Why does this matter? Because the settlers of America were not just "conquer" or "Pale Faced Demons" they were people with a muse, mien, and milieu, which culminated in their machinations for conquering. A conquering power may not ever see or empathize with another until they have faced the same, similar, or severely different conflict. The victims of invasion are not the only ones who can see the value of a healthy environment, the doctor saw it, many fans saw it, the Na'vi could see their sentient planet better than we. Why is it ok for Jake to take what he wants? Because while people and communities posses objective and subjective desires which may not align, the overwhelming desire Jake desired aligned with that of the Na'vi; whereas the overwhelming desire of the Humans went against the Na'vi. Tyler... You should be able to see this. Though your tone expresses a hint of disillusioned dismay... The absolute delimma is, what I would agree, that Jake was depicted as being a better leader that any of the Na'vi males. But here where the human condition v. Inhuman condition lies. What he brought in experience and knowledge of humanity could be and would be akinned to how a woman selects a mate - hypergamy. Sure, the Na'vi are big, strong, fast, and skilled fighters, though as we could see, that rejected humanity. This stands as a key weakness here, even once they let Jake in. If a group hope to prevail, they observe and analyze their enemy, adapt to and adopt from without losing themselves. Humanity is not the form it's the way of the spirit. ✨🧚‍♀️Oooo 🧚‍♂️✨, I know... But it's true. How can one write about, to or for their audience if they don't know them. You're talking about a reality where most don't know who or what they are, so... Study. Study and you realize how spiritual humanity is. Once you grasp then you will see, Na'vi is more akin to let's say "Earthling" than it is to how they cohabitate with their own kind. Inhumanity is an apathetic state of being which is quite nihilistic and sadistic. The line between a river known by many for millennial taking their share and an individual or small group fencing it off, bottling it up, and selling it back to those who "owned" it. If my thoughts have flowed in the way I intended them to, think about what I've stated here. The better you know what breeds life, The greater you can write a story conserving or destroying it. Because that's really what every story is about. Do you feel like you're dying working in that cubicle, or are you one of those individuals who find it exhilarating to work in that cubicle?

... I fully, positively, and passionately hated this loathsome b------ of a film when it was first released, based on everything you successfully destroyed in your opening premise. Thank you for coming through and making this the film it should have been ... 🤗 ...

Cameron: White Savior trope Mowery: story with character dilemmas...

I’ve seen this movie so many times and don’t remember the names of the characters or the plot 😂 so thanks for explaining it, that film was horrendously long and boring to me, now I see it’s a basic plot with alien avatars.

I love your work but you're wrong here...and I can give you 2.8 billion reasons why.

This is definitely a movie that needed fixing. While I loved the visuals, action, and James Horner's musical score, the characters were pretty shallow and its environmental messages come off as ham-fisted, condescending, and pretty hypocritical. It's like, "if you cut down trees for profit, you're a terrible person" and yet, this movie had a budget of $237 million. You know how many trees they'd be cutting down to print that much money?

@DigiMyst

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None actually. Modern money is made out of cotton and linen.

@cjkalandek996

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@@DigiMyst how modern? Like, within the last 10 years or beyond that?

@DigiMyst

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@@cjkalandek996 I would assume a few decades, though the exact time is hard to find. All I know is money has been cotton and linen for a while. You'll have to do your own research.

@cjkalandek996

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@@DigiMyst Fine, but do you see my point of the movie's messages being hypocritical?

@alfredmorris4511

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You don’t think the environmental costs of making a movie are justified by the awesome pro-nature message of that movie? Seriously? So the environmentalists will have to keep their mouths shut and never make their case because of the environmental cost? That makes no sense. I mean everything has an environmental cost of some kind right? Even a documentary. How else do you get your message out to a massive audience?

I don't particularly like this movie that much but it seems like your interpretation is deeply flawed. Jake didn't "take" anything, by saying that he did, you are essentially disregarding the na'vi's individual choices. Doing so implies that the na'vi are too stupid to realize that Jake is somehow being tyrannical... I think that anyone who looks at the film objectively can see that's a twisted argument. You are portraying Jake's actions as some form of cultural appropriation, when in reality its cultural assimilation. Overall this video seems like you are projecting some sort of real world racial lens on a movie that is essentially about taking care of the environment and placing importance on other cultures. It was still well made and overall entertaining, but in the future you might want to try and analyse your viewpoint thoroughly before committing to it.

(1) Neytiri didn't spare Jake because he has a "strong heart." She spared him because, when she was literally about to take him out with her bow when a forest spirit landed on her arrow, causing her to take pause and rethink her decision. She later decides to take him to meet her father and mother when many of these same "spirits" land on Jake, which she takes as a sign that he is different than the others. (2) It's not called "Unobtanium." That's just the word used by the RDA in the film because its scientific name is too long and its Na'Vi name is too hard to pronounce ("lingtskxe") (3) Calling Dr. Augustine's arguments against the RDA and their mercenaries as vague and saying you don't understand how it impacts the story just means you didn't understand the story. Everything Augustine says is essentially the religion of the Na'Vi. That'd be like watching a movie about the crusades and stating that you don't understand the importance of discussing religious beliefs or how those beliefs might impact the story of someone who's having those beliefs challenged. The humans spent an unholy amount of time and money to travel to a distant world so that they can make even MORE money by harvesting the minerals they need to corner the market of space travel back home, and they're willing to uproot, and even genocidally eradicate the natives of this world in order to get what they want. The only thing really standing in their way is the scientists who serve as PR for this corporation back home, because, to quote the movie 'Congo', "No one wants to be seen on National Geographic standing next to a dead gorilla." (4) You said, "It doesn't make sense that Jake would try to talk with the Na'Vi after stating he didn't think they'd ever move." It makes perfect sense. If you're tied to a chair and I tell you I'm going to kill your dog and there's nothing you can say to stop me, are you going to just accept that and let me kill your dog in silence, or are you going to still TRY to get me to change my mind? It's called pleading and it makes perfect sense. (5) Your biggest hangups about the story seem to stem from a place of appropriation and the fact that Jake is a white guy moving in on an indigenous people. It's a dishonest place of bias to see the film this way as the actual message is, culture's aren't based on what you are, but what you believe, which is why you can have someone from another race/species standing up for something alien to them (literally or figuratively). This theme isn't a new one. We've seen it with Dances with Wolves, with Enemy Mine, and a slew of others over the years. (6) Jake didn't "take" Neytiri. She gave herself to him. Tsu'Tey didn't attack Jake because of what happened at the tree. They were never cool with one another, not until the final act of the film when Jake earns his respect by uniting the clans under the wings of the Toruk. He attacked Jake because Jake and Ney'tiri slept together. He could tell by how Ney'tiri was dressed that she'd gone through the ceremony of mating. And you'll notice Tsu'Tey doesn't say, "You mated with MY woman!" He asks, "You mated with THIS woman?" meaning that he doesn't care who he mated with, just that he slept with anyone at all since he's always seen Jake as an outsider and only entertained Jake's study of their people at the request of the chief. Mother of God, man, I'm only like 7 minutes in and it's clear you didn't "watch" this movie. You did, however, succeed in getting me to comment on your video which will boost the algorithm and whatnot, so kudos for that, but the arrogance you put forth on thinking you can "fix" a 3 billion dollar award winning film is mind-blowing. Maybe focus on your own writing before you bother yourself with fixing someone else's.

@alunaline

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Tank you! I was too lazy to answer. It’s cool to make videos to help new writers, but this is just amateurism.

Thank you for taking down this flaming garbage. It's a bad movie whose only redemption is the technology of how it was made. If not for that people would see it as the tired preachy boring story that it is

I don't find words to describe this awful review, really! You are discussing it not as a writer but as a reader which means you only discuss what is made not how it is made and how to make it written better.

You know so much about screenwriting that you can fix avatar and interstellar, why don't you write something original ? Share it with us then we see how good you are? Talking about screenwriting is easy but writing something great is an entirely different story. I am sorry but it needed to be said nothing personal.

Do you honestly believe by interjecting your own observations about the theme of the movie and by changing the actual flow of the story, that you are providing a fix for the total story? Granted there are parts within the story which lack polish and do not follow well from one scene to another. However, that gives the story its ability to encourage those watching the movie , to actually involve themselves, in the actual imaginary scheme, of the story. Your ideas as to what will fix the movie is your way of fighting the frustration of not being able to compose a story on your own. It is easier to tear apart another’s work than it is to actually create and complete one’s own. You are kidding yourself if you truly believe you are the fixer. I see your job as actually a part within the phrase” there are those who do and then there are those who teach and then there are those who don’t” choose which one you feel most comfortable with. Then expound upon your discovery, as life brings about an original story. One that you can claim to of created and to be proud of.

No offence, this story is very "White Saviourish" Isn't that like a trope or something? The white chosen dude (very 80s mystical oriental martial arts vibes)

@freebantu6019

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Also, this is basically an African colonialism story... Those aliens look like, and dress like, and are tall like, and act like the Masai people of Kenya.

@UltimateKyuubiFox

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The original movie is very much a white savior narrative.

Tyler you ain't rich man so why do you go to great lengths to make people think you are based off how you present yourself and your content? This is one of the most fatalistic ways to getting people to lose confidence in themselves when YOU don't present yourself in a way that makes you seem more grounded.

@cjkalandek996

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So...you're saying he can't do what he does for both educational and recreational purposes because he's not rich?