common app essay that got me accepted to the ivy league + tips | upenn

common app essay that got me accepted to an ivy league school!
i applied to the university of pennsylvania back in november for early decision and i was lucky enough to get in in december!
hopefully, this video helps you guys in some shape or form. if its good, here's some inspiration. if it's bad, you got yourself a great example of what not to do and maybe it'll show you that you don't need a great essay to get into a great school!
feel free to comment if you want me to read your essay and give you some advice! id be happy to give my 2 cents :)
best of luck!
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  • @haleykang8156
    @haleykang81563 жыл бұрын

    hey guys! im so glad so many of you guys are finding my essay helpful! unfortunately, i decided to stop editing essays sent to me because it's been taking up a lot of my time. i never expected to get so many requests and especially with the school year coming up, i want to focus on enjoying the time i have left up until the fall and getting ready to do my best! hope you guys understand :)

  • @sharonkelvin1673

    @sharonkelvin1673

    3 жыл бұрын

    Hi please can I mail you about my essay ? I have to write for a schorlaship

  • @ichenx5635

    @ichenx5635

    3 жыл бұрын

    @@sharonkelvin1673 no

  • @aurora-cc6hk

    @aurora-cc6hk

    3 жыл бұрын

    @@edsradio5817 did u read the fuckin comment..

  • @ayu23396

    @ayu23396

    3 жыл бұрын

    @Kenn Klein bruh this is plagiarism...feel free to do it if u want to get expelled and have a permanent academic dishonesty record :)

  • @lohanwilliams1619

    @lohanwilliams1619

    3 жыл бұрын

    Hi friends, If you are struggling with writing your essays or handling your assignments, I would love to help. I'm a professional freelance writer with a vast knowledge in tackling essays and assignments in general. Feel free to email me at lohanwilliams25@gmail.com if you interested with such a service.

  • @easton9583
    @easton95833 жыл бұрын

    I feel that I'm never going to have that "spark" in my essay. I have no cool achievements and especially with quarantine I have no opportunities. I had so much planned for this year. Re-join track, join the robotics club, get involved in leadership programs, try to create a club with my friends etc. Now, something just as simple as keeping up my grades is difficult. I hate being trapped in this 10 by 11 room

  • @shanam7308

    @shanam7308

    3 жыл бұрын

    Hey! I hope you're doing better now! My advice is find the one thing that makes you happy and write about it. I don't think colleges are looking for anything spectacular. They're just looking for something authentic. If something has helped you grow into the person you are today- write about it!

  • @kai6375

    @kai6375

    3 жыл бұрын

    oof

  • @jacks2663

    @jacks2663

    3 жыл бұрын

    Write your essay about this!

  • @pitad2766

    @pitad2766

    3 жыл бұрын

    @Easton I LOVE YOUR PFP (i hope you're doing better now)

  • @easton9583

    @easton9583

    3 жыл бұрын

    @@pitad2766 Omg hi fellow sk8 fan- tysm!! I actually am doing a lot better now!

  • @saychu556
    @saychu5563 жыл бұрын

    I’m a senior rn and I haven’t even started my college applications...

  • @qingqingzhao1436

    @qingqingzhao1436

    3 жыл бұрын

    girlllll me too, I started a few weeks ago

  • @haleykang8156

    @haleykang8156

    3 жыл бұрын

    to be fair i barely started this time last year haha

  • @oj5015

    @oj5015

    3 жыл бұрын

    It’s ok, i just started sooooo

  • @beautifulminded2577

    @beautifulminded2577

    3 жыл бұрын

    same

  • @madip360

    @madip360

    3 жыл бұрын

    Same here , hella stressed

  • @riyab8786
    @riyab87863 жыл бұрын

    Your essay was incredible!! It was so refreshing to see your metaphor weaved into the essay throughout. But I'm so nervous I haven't even started yet😭

  • @haleykang8156

    @haleykang8156

    3 жыл бұрын

    aw thank youuu. also, it's totally fine, i was in the same boat as you last year

  • @tsiyong7583
    @tsiyong75834 жыл бұрын

    This is by far the best common app essay I have heard and trust me I’ve watched quite a lot of videos lol!

  • @haleykang8156

    @haleykang8156

    4 жыл бұрын

    oh my god thanks sm! lol not sure about that but it means alot to hear :'))

  • @rubikashree7724
    @rubikashree77243 жыл бұрын

    That was such a mindboggling transition from making cookies to debating in another country. girl my jaws have been dropped

  • @haleykang8156

    @haleykang8156

    3 жыл бұрын

    haha thankssss

  • @sophiebazydola3311
    @sophiebazydola33114 жыл бұрын

    this was so helpful!! I've been so lost over where to start with my essay and seeing someone who is more "normal" and doesn't have any crazy life experiences was so refreshing, thank you for this video!!

  • @haleykang8156

    @haleykang8156

    3 жыл бұрын

    ah that means so much :')

  • @Astrogrrl
    @Astrogrrl3 жыл бұрын

    I’m a senior right now and now I’m regretting waiting till now to start writing my essay 😖

  • @haleykang8156

    @haleykang8156

    3 жыл бұрын

    lolll it’s okay

  • @talial8071

    @talial8071

    3 жыл бұрын

    Same

  • @vatsala6497

    @vatsala6497

    3 жыл бұрын

    Lmao wut. I started today with my deadline in a week 😅 Unless your talkin bout ED

  • @lohanwilliams1619

    @lohanwilliams1619

    3 жыл бұрын

    Hi Zoe and friends, Just read your comment and if in the future you strugge with writing your essays or handling your assignments, I would love to help. I'm a professional freelance writer with a vast knowledge in tackling essays and assignments in general. Feel free to email me at lohanwilliams25@gmail.com if you interested with such a service.

  • @sambam1583
    @sambam15833 жыл бұрын

    “July before senior year” Me: *stresses bc its December 22nd OF SENIOR YEAR and the deadlines are February 1st*😳

  • @jackmoffatt8647

    @jackmoffatt8647

    3 жыл бұрын

    I think you mean Jan 1st 😳

  • @raquelbueno3697

    @raquelbueno3697

    3 жыл бұрын

    I am in the same situation. I was writing one but it wasn't good. I had to start all over again. Ps: my deadline is New Years Eve.

  • @mariakara5167

    @mariakara5167

    3 жыл бұрын

    @@raquelbueno3697 i just started writing and the deadline is jan 1st 😬

  • @raquelbueno3697

    @raquelbueno3697

    3 жыл бұрын

    ,@@mariakara5167 we are all together

  • @mariakara5167

    @mariakara5167

    3 жыл бұрын

    @@Fsanskritisukkal I started two days ago but i deleted everything. The deadline is in a few hours and i have no common app essay

  • @popcorncat123454321
    @popcorncat1234543213 жыл бұрын

    starting in july is late?? screams oops i better get on it

  • @haleykang8156

    @haleykang8156

    3 жыл бұрын

    that was literally me last year

  • @bunnyfood3646

    @bunnyfood3646

    3 жыл бұрын

    Yikes I'm starting in August 😬

  • @bethanytong2338

    @bethanytong2338

    3 жыл бұрын

    ahah you got this:) alsooo if you're interested, my friends and i started a company called collegae (collegae.weebly.com) that provides affordable college counseling where you can speak to a collegian from schools (we have stanford, uc berkeley, harvard, upenn, princeton, and so much more) for just $20/ half hour! hope this helps:)

  • @skifast_takechances

    @skifast_takechances

    3 жыл бұрын

    @@bethanytong2338 This is an awesome organization and seems very reputable, but I think there should be a bit more information on who is actually reviewing the essay - maybe an about page with the team and their accomplishments.

  • @64_bit80

    @64_bit80

    3 жыл бұрын

    i started in fucking december lets gooooooooooooooooo

  • @winwinnie4905
    @winwinnie49054 жыл бұрын

    oof it's july before senior year and i'm trying to start now lol i just wrote 5 paragraphs of trash that don't really say anything about me so i guess imma move on to topic 2 lol

  • @haleykang8156

    @haleykang8156

    4 жыл бұрын

    haha that’s the spirit?

  • @winwinnie4905

    @winwinnie4905

    4 жыл бұрын

    @@haleykang8156 i... guess...? it's so hard to sit down and start writing tho

  • @closet7041

    @closet7041

    4 жыл бұрын

    yeah same lmao. I wrote 2 essays off the top of my head and both were self-pitying trash. but my 3rd essay that I just completed i think is really good.

  • @winwinnie4905

    @winwinnie4905

    4 жыл бұрын

    @@closet7041 omg yay! thanks for the inspiration lol

  • @AndrewTranChung

    @AndrewTranChung

    4 жыл бұрын

    Don’t fret you’ve got a great start

  • @daralau720
    @daralau7202 жыл бұрын

    thank you so much for sharing! i was having such a difficult time working with ideas that i really didn't care about or didn't feel connected to. when you said you made a list of everything that you would do if you had all the time in the world was something i actually forgot to think about and now i'm coming up with so many good ideas and am feeling so much for confident!! :) and congrats on UPenn!!

  • @shoedogodo_5621
    @shoedogodo_56212 жыл бұрын

    I'm currently a high school senior working on my application. Out of all the common app essays, I liked yours the most. I really liked how you stayed relatable while keeping your essay structure fresh and unique!

  • @chrispark5293
    @chrispark52933 жыл бұрын

    EARLY DECISIONS ARE ON NOV 1 AND I HAVENT EVEN FINISHED MY PERSONAL ESSAY.

  • @haleykang8156

    @haleykang8156

    3 жыл бұрын

    ITS OKAY I DIDNT HAVE MINE FINISHED BY THEN EITHER

  • @femichee5185

    @femichee5185

    3 жыл бұрын

    ME TOO AAAAA

  • @jjnojam886

    @jjnojam886

    3 жыл бұрын

    Girl same

  • @viv7169

    @viv7169

    3 жыл бұрын

    Same lmaoo

  • @winwinnie4905

    @winwinnie4905

    3 жыл бұрын

    ME NEITHER

  • @virajtayshete3382
    @virajtayshete33828 ай бұрын

    Loved how you stayed raw and real. One of those few essays that never really feels boring even after reading it a couple of times

  • @bellesee8167
    @bellesee81674 жыл бұрын

    I absolutely love the essay and the way you wrote it as it just felt so modest and personal yet flawless and well-crafted.

  • @haleykang8156

    @haleykang8156

    4 жыл бұрын

    :')))) thanks sm. this brightened my day so much. dont boost my ego too much though ;)

  • @vic9765
    @vic97654 жыл бұрын

    This is the best essay video I have ever seen and I have been binging these kinds of videos for, well, a long time. Thank you

  • @haleykang8156

    @haleykang8156

    4 жыл бұрын

    :') thanks this comment is so nice

  • @sabamehrzad7623
    @sabamehrzad76234 жыл бұрын

    loved your essay! i thought that starting off with the puzzles was so cool because it was a literal passion of yours and can be used metaphorically when learning about your own life! :)

  • @haleykang8156

    @haleykang8156

    4 жыл бұрын

    thanks! im glad my direction ended up working pretty well. i was really nervous abt it when i was writing it haha

  • @letigaytan5376
    @letigaytan53763 жыл бұрын

    Girl I don’t even know where to put my commas 😔

  • @haleykang8156

    @haleykang8156

    3 жыл бұрын

    rippp

  • @lohanwilliams1619

    @lohanwilliams1619

    3 жыл бұрын

    Hi Cinco, If you are struggling with writing your essays or handling your assignments, I would love to help. I'm a professional freelance writer with a vast knowledge in tackling essays and assignments in general. Feel free to email me at lohanwilliams25@gmail.com if you interested with such a service.

  • @khaingwailwin2155
    @khaingwailwin21552 жыл бұрын

    I have been struggling with my personal essay for the whole week, writing at least 3 topics but couldn't find anything that resonates with me. I found your video really helpful. I love your essay so much. I don't find it cliche. Thank you for your video and keep up the great work. ✨

  • @morri_6308
    @morri_63084 жыл бұрын

    Your essay is so amazing, I love everything about it, the word choice creativity and humor can really make me know who you are!! I am writing my common app right now your essay really did give me inspiration to processed with mine:)

  • @haleykang8156

    @haleykang8156

    4 жыл бұрын

    aw this made my day :')

  • @ShristiGhimire
    @ShristiGhimire3 жыл бұрын

    omg your essay is making me sooo nervous! how can someone write sooo good? loads of love! happy to find your channel

  • @haleykang8156

    @haleykang8156

    3 жыл бұрын

    ahh thank you so much!!!

  • @harinder5146

    @harinder5146

    Жыл бұрын

    what university did you get into?

  • @momonz7656
    @momonz76563 жыл бұрын

    Wow this is by far the best essay I have heard. Thanks. I didn’t even think of writing about my middle school days that meant so much to me and that I still reminisce on 🥰

  • @haleykang8156

    @haleykang8156

    3 жыл бұрын

    yay hopefully it helps you figure out your essay!

  • @milkbread4527
    @milkbread45272 жыл бұрын

    You are so articulate, Haley. Like someone else commented, the way your puzzle metaphor was worked into the essay is impressive. Also, you give off a really friendly and humble vibe. Thank you for this video.

  • @haleykang8156

    @haleykang8156

    Жыл бұрын

    aw thank you so muchb

  • @kirstinmueller7861
    @kirstinmueller78614 жыл бұрын

    currently going into senior year and have been working on my essay for when i apply to nyu early decision this fall. this video has given me so much inspiration! thank you so much, and amazing work. congrats on upenn!

  • @haleykang8156

    @haleykang8156

    4 жыл бұрын

    :'))) aw thanks so much. means a lot

  • @AlexaMarsh
    @AlexaMarsh4 жыл бұрын

    I love your essay! Congratulations on UPenn!

  • @haleykang8156

    @haleykang8156

    4 жыл бұрын

    thank you!!!

  • @gardener_jojo
    @gardener_jojo Жыл бұрын

    your attitude is so adorable :)) thank you for considerate advice! it helped me alot

  • @tiramisu434
    @tiramisu4344 жыл бұрын

    thank you so much for offering your advice-as someone who has also watched a lot of these college videos, i found it rlly refreshing to hear the perspective of someone more 'normal'. i really like the way your essay conveyed your personality and i got a lot of insight on how i should approach my own essay from this! congrats on upenn and looking forward to your college vlogs :)

  • @haleykang8156

    @haleykang8156

    4 жыл бұрын

    thank you so much :') it means a lot to hear. always here to help!

  • @bethanytong2338

    @bethanytong2338

    3 жыл бұрын

    hey! if you're interested, my friends and i started a company called collegae (collegae.weebly.com) that provides affordable college counseling where you can speak to a collegian from schools (we have stanford, uc berkeley, harvard, upenn, princeton, and so much more) for just $20/ half hour! hope this helps:)

  • @harirao7929
    @harirao79293 жыл бұрын

    I've watched a bunch of videos on tips for the ca essay but yours just resonates with me so much!!

  • @haleykang8156

    @haleykang8156

    3 жыл бұрын

    aw thank youuu

  • @tamarirekhviashvili4142
    @tamarirekhviashvili41423 жыл бұрын

    I loved the way your essay started! I’m literally writing mine on how watching parks and rec changed me because I have no exciting moments in my life.

  • @haleykang8156

    @haleykang8156

    3 жыл бұрын

    oh my god i love it

  • @tamarirekhviashvili4142

    @tamarirekhviashvili4142

    3 жыл бұрын

    haley kang thank you :D

  • @bigcesar7106
    @bigcesar71063 жыл бұрын

    What a masterpiece of essay tbh.

  • @haleykang8156

    @haleykang8156

    3 жыл бұрын

    thank you thank you lol

  • @alicelee13
    @alicelee133 жыл бұрын

    WOW that was one of the best essays i've ever read no surprise you got into upenn!! i wish you the best in the future

  • @haleykang8156

    @haleykang8156

    3 жыл бұрын

    aw thanks!!

  • @viniciusconograi5343
    @viniciusconograi53432 жыл бұрын

    I just wanna thank you for this video, by far the best video with tips about the Common App Essay I've ever seen! I am also applying for Upenn :)

  • @gabrielamay3558
    @gabrielamay35583 жыл бұрын

    omg this helped me so much! is there a google doc or anything i can read of it, i’d like to show it to my friend that’s also struggling with her common app and how to smoothly lead into the metaphor, you did a great job girl!

  • @chloe2525
    @chloe25254 жыл бұрын

    Tysm for sharing this ! I’ve been having a few ideas for my essay but can’t really develop them. This helped me

  • @haleykang8156

    @haleykang8156

    4 жыл бұрын

    yayyy :)))) all i could ask for

  • @AntonioJMeloni
    @AntonioJMeloni2 жыл бұрын

    This was a truly helpful video. At first, I was worried that I needed a special topic to talk about in my essay. Now I am confident that I can find/choose a topic in my life to explore/expand/explain. Thank you for everything.

  • @alexanderbroose3027

    @alexanderbroose3027

    2 жыл бұрын

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    @emilycarter8922

    2 жыл бұрын

    You might want to check this out kzread.info/dash/bejne/mYJ21MZ-j6a4aJM.html

  • @sofiahenriquez1802
    @sofiahenriquez18023 жыл бұрын

    Your essay was so refreshing💗 I loved it

  • @cattatuie
    @cattatuie3 жыл бұрын

    This inspired me to write my first (technically 2nd?) draft of my ps haha. Before, I kind of had a hard time formatting and structuring all my thoughts to write my essay. After hearing yours, it helped me make sense of everything a lot better and now I think I finally have a pretty solid draft. Honestly tysm!!

  • @haleykang8156

    @haleykang8156

    3 жыл бұрын

    aw yay im glad you found it helpful :')

  • @miaa1762
    @miaa17623 жыл бұрын

    It's August and apps opened on the first, but its already the fifth and I'm still brainstorming. I want to apply before November for early decision, so I am sweating 👁👄👁

  • @haleykang8156

    @haleykang8156

    3 жыл бұрын

    haha don't worry i felt the same way

  • @dayannasalas847

    @dayannasalas847

    3 жыл бұрын

    I also ED'ed to Penn and started brainstorming once I started school lol. You should be okay if you are very motivated~

  • @syndeybinch

    @syndeybinch

    3 жыл бұрын

    ME TOO

  • @jasmintagijeva3606

    @jasmintagijeva3606

    3 жыл бұрын

    Bruh, Im literally starting now

  • @syndeybinch

    @syndeybinch

    3 жыл бұрын

    Jasmin Tagijeva you’re fine don’t worry most people are starting right now

  • @achrafelmadnaoui909
    @achrafelmadnaoui9094 жыл бұрын

    Just finished junior year and been brainstorming ideas for a week now. This essay is gonna take forever 😱 (btw ur essay was amazing)

  • @haleykang8156

    @haleykang8156

    4 жыл бұрын

    aw thank youuu! good luck and always here to help :)

  • @anaolmosvico761
    @anaolmosvico7613 жыл бұрын

    hi Haley!! thank you so much for all your tips and sharing your essay. it might not feel like it but you're really saving all of us going through applications right now ahaha. I'm trying to get as many people as I can to read my essay, so if you have time to do so, I would love it if you could read through it as well (no pressure, though!! I know you're busy already)

  • @diyandstuff1265
    @diyandstuff12653 жыл бұрын

    I LOVE YOU OMG AN IDEA SPARKED IN MY HEAD BECAUSE OF THISSS

  • @haleykang8156

    @haleykang8156

    3 жыл бұрын

    YES YOU GO!!

  • @Angie-oo4fl
    @Angie-oo4fl3 жыл бұрын

    ahh your essay was so good thank you for sharing it with us! (also i guessed u were a debater from the way u talked in your common app mistakes vid and im so shook i was actually right HAHA sincerely a fellow debater :')

  • @haleykang8156

    @haleykang8156

    3 жыл бұрын

    thank you so much :’))) and yeah haha i was a debater but not a very good one

  • @henrypark4356
    @henrypark43562 жыл бұрын

    4:35 What a unique, strong ending 😍 that’s both surprising and insightful!!! Huge cheers for this essay

  • @nickiiishan5050
    @nickiiishan50504 жыл бұрын

    THIS IS AN AMAZING ESSAY! Congrats on getting into UPenn!

  • @haleykang8156

    @haleykang8156

    4 жыл бұрын

    ah thanks!!!

  • @HER04
    @HER04 Жыл бұрын

    Your essay was great. And thank you for making this video, it helps a lot.

  • @ayushibatwara
    @ayushibatwara3 жыл бұрын

    you are so humble, i appreciate it ❤️

  • @haleykang8156

    @haleykang8156

    3 жыл бұрын

    thanks so much haha :))

  • @lulua5714
    @lulua57143 жыл бұрын

    Your essay is “*chef’s kiss*” incredible, it’s so out there. I love it! Is there any way you could help me edit with mine, it’s really cringe and I’m so stuck right now.

  • @maxz4819
    @maxz48192 жыл бұрын

    You’re a huge help and inspiration. Thank you so much!

  • @austinlai9670
    @austinlai96702 жыл бұрын

    I LOVE YOUR ANALOGY

  • @erickang1098
    @erickang10984 жыл бұрын

    After watching some college videos, I’m definitely starting to understand that EC’s and the personal statement seem to be more enticing then simply numbers (SAT/ACT, GPA), even if all these factors remain important. Thanks for sharing this

  • @haleykang8156

    @haleykang8156

    4 жыл бұрын

    yay :)

  • @chloes1308
    @chloes13084 жыл бұрын

    this really helped a lot, thank you! the end of my junior year is this Friday, so I'm kind of thinking of some topics to write about so I won't be cramming my senior year hehe

  • @haleykang8156

    @haleykang8156

    4 жыл бұрын

    hey youre already ahead of me then haha!

  • @jazminlara7660
    @jazminlara76603 жыл бұрын

    Your essay tips really resonate with me! I start multiple drafts and only get a few sentences in because I feel they are so cringey lol. I have always been a huge procrastinator but maybe this is the one thing I should have started wayyy earlier :((

  • @lyndseywanner165
    @lyndseywanner1653 жыл бұрын

    cooking with lydia is amazing and i'm so glad she's getting the respect she deserves

  • @haleykang8156

    @haleykang8156

    3 жыл бұрын

    facts!!

  • @evemango8764
    @evemango87644 жыл бұрын

    thank you for this!!! july before my senior year and your tips were super helpful :) gonna go write lol

  • @haleykang8156

    @haleykang8156

    4 жыл бұрын

    yay!! good luck

  • @ananyamohan6805
    @ananyamohan68054 жыл бұрын

    Beautiful essay! Loved it :)

  • @haleykang8156

    @haleykang8156

    4 жыл бұрын

    aw thanks!

  • @user-oo1tr6ym9v
    @user-oo1tr6ym9v Жыл бұрын

    your essay was so perfect!

  • @jeffrey2326
    @jeffrey2326 Жыл бұрын

    Thanks that was really helpful, I’m writing my essay last minute and that really helped 🙏

  • @laprincesa9803
    @laprincesa98033 жыл бұрын

    I’m barely going into my junior year but I already started to brainstorm, I can see why u got into penn congrats ❣️

  • @haleykang8156

    @haleykang8156

    3 жыл бұрын

    thanks!! and haha you're already doing wayyy better than i was doing lol

  • @apinkpiggy1
    @apinkpiggy12 жыл бұрын

    Great job Haley! I am a mom so I had to laugh when you said you started in July and you felt it was too late. I have a senior and wish I nagged him in July 😂. Wishing you the best in school!

  • @kikik2533
    @kikik25334 жыл бұрын

    god bless u i hope u get everything good out of life. u deserve the very best.

  • @haleykang8156

    @haleykang8156

    4 жыл бұрын

    lol thanks

  • @chaealee7440
    @chaealee74404 жыл бұрын

    this is amazing omg i learned a lot from this video !! and ure super cute btw 🥺

  • @haleykang8156

    @haleykang8156

    4 жыл бұрын

    ah thanks you🥰🥰

  • @ronalds271
    @ronalds2712 жыл бұрын

    Thank you for sharing your essay. It is amazing.

  • @ATH3NSONLIN3
    @ATH3NSONLIN33 жыл бұрын

    unrelated but you are seriously so pretty your freckles are adorable

  • @miraaravamuthan5796
    @miraaravamuthan57963 жыл бұрын

    This video was so helpful!! Thank you!

  • @haleykang8156

    @haleykang8156

    3 жыл бұрын

    you’re welcome!!!

  • @urvivallapareddy2206
    @urvivallapareddy22063 жыл бұрын

    THIS IS SO GOOD

  • @haleykang8156

    @haleykang8156

    3 жыл бұрын

    THANKS

  • @emilynguyen7766
    @emilynguyen77663 жыл бұрын

    I got sucked into your channel and I don’t have one regret

  • @haleykang8156

    @haleykang8156

    3 жыл бұрын

    hahaaaa thank youuuu

  • @exoticcats6119
    @exoticcats61194 жыл бұрын

    I feel like my life is so normal that I don’t have any hard life experiences to talk about besides some friends moving away but I got over that pretty fast. If I could dig through my memories I’d probably find something but if I was changed by it I didn’t notice what changed me.

  • @haleykang8156

    @haleykang8156

    4 жыл бұрын

    i mean i don’t think i’ve hs that much of an interesting life either lol. i don’t think you need a unique life to have a chance. like i literally wrote my essay on liking puzzles

  • @annaliadesigns
    @annaliadesigns3 жыл бұрын

    Oh my gosh that was so good!!

  • @haleykang8156

    @haleykang8156

    3 жыл бұрын

    haha thanks!

  • @akshathmalik1259
    @akshathmalik12594 жыл бұрын

    Really liked your approach to the Common App Essay, especially how you created a narrative out of a seemingly small concept!

  • @haleykang8156

    @haleykang8156

    4 жыл бұрын

    thanks so much! that was my goal haha

  • @akshathmalik1259

    @akshathmalik1259

    4 жыл бұрын

    You’re welcome! I was considering applying to a few US Universities myself (for the class of 25) are you still willing to offer some feedback perhaps?

  • @haleykang8156

    @haleykang8156

    4 жыл бұрын

    sure no problem! it might take a few days for me to get to it though!

  • @akshathmalik1259

    @akshathmalik1259

    4 жыл бұрын

    More than ok with me! I’ll actually need a few more days to come up with a proper draft - could I get your email to send it over perhaps?

  • @haleykang8156

    @haleykang8156

    4 жыл бұрын

    can you dm me on instagram instead lol.its in the about section of all my videos. i just dont want my email in the comments. not a big deal but ya know

  • @kai6375
    @kai63753 жыл бұрын

    very helpful, i def needed this

  • @haleykang8156

    @haleykang8156

    3 жыл бұрын

    glad it helped :)

  • @binniepatel710
    @binniepatel7103 жыл бұрын

    This helps so much!!

  • @haleykang8156

    @haleykang8156

    3 жыл бұрын

    yayyyy

  • @aarna7128
    @aarna71283 жыл бұрын

    Loved the vid!!

  • @stephaniecole-sanchez9570
    @stephaniecole-sanchez9570 Жыл бұрын

    awesome. So many are...not awesome. Your essay was awesome. Even the mix of diff sized sentences "...I took a nap" held on to me. The figures of speech, the sounds you used and the central idea...the moment. The moment. Good job! The goal: write something, do many (8?) drafts, yes, follow some rules, yes, show it to someone you trust for help, BUT take the risk. ?Then, you'll be soooo attached to and protective of it, it'll be undeniable. Like, "If they don't like it, I don't like THEM!" :) People: if you go somewhere, to a place you really were, you can take us there too. And we will be moved. About puzzle pieces. Which you thought nothing of until this.

  • @skylamoreno
    @skylamoreno3 жыл бұрын

    I feel so extremely stupid. I am so late to the entire college application process! It is nearly the end of August and I haven’t even started writing my essay. I had no idea I had to start so early. So basically I’m not getting into college 😪

  • @aminainwonderland9098

    @aminainwonderland9098

    3 жыл бұрын

    Girl you still have time!! Deadline for early action is in November and for regular it’s in January. You got this, good luck💕💕💕💕

  • @skylamoreno

    @skylamoreno

    3 жыл бұрын

    Amina In Wonderland thank you! 🥺

  • @hatcheese2270

    @hatcheese2270

    3 жыл бұрын

    ur fine! she said it only actually took her 2 weeks it was just spread out

  • @bbyboog6823

    @bbyboog6823

    3 жыл бұрын

    dude im just starting it today 😭😭

  • @lalabest1aj

    @lalabest1aj

    3 жыл бұрын

    Hunny I just started my common app now in October

  • @nikhilpurbey7168
    @nikhilpurbey7168 Жыл бұрын

    Ty for the video. I kind of get now how I could structure my essay

  • @genevieveaiwonegbe8615
    @genevieveaiwonegbe86153 жыл бұрын

    This video what so helpful for me. I have good grades but no extra curriculum. So the essay part is what’s gonna make me stand out.

  • @chelseavlogz22
    @chelseavlogz223 жыл бұрын

    hey i loved your essay and i was wondering when do you add descriptive words (that are more specific and show passion)

  • @toaaliyah
    @toaaliyah3 жыл бұрын

    I have two weeks to turn in an essay that I haven't even started..... Your videos are helping a lot though so thank you!!!

  • @lohanwilliams1619

    @lohanwilliams1619

    3 жыл бұрын

    Hi Aaliyah, If you are struggling with writing your essays or handling your assignments, I would love to help. I'm a professional freelance writer with a vast knowledge in tackling essays and assignments in general. Feel free to email me at lohanwilliams25@gmail.com if you interested with such a service.

  • @g.quagmire7583
    @g.quagmire75834 жыл бұрын

    this is pretty good. surprised it doesn't have more views. welp, I'm commenting on the algorithm.

  • @haleykang8156

    @haleykang8156

    4 жыл бұрын

    lolll thanks. this comment gives me big graham stephan vibes

  • @invincible888
    @invincible8884 жыл бұрын

    Congratz on getting into Upenn btw could you tell me like whereto start this college app essay journey like in inception you have many things to write but like how to choose the perfect thing to write ehich really represents yourself ? Like wht factors will determine the topic/thing you should write on

  • @haleykang8156

    @haleykang8156

    4 жыл бұрын

    well in terms of coming up with ideas, I made a list of things that I personally feel passionate about and tried to focus on themes that I thought would be unique and personal to me. Also, I tried to stray away from anything too academic or related to school because I wanted to focus on showing another side of myself that is totally seperate from stats and ecs. In terms of choosing my final topic to go all in on, there werent that many factors that I had in mind other than what was the easiest for me to write about. I found that the topics I found easier to write on came across more personal and genuine since I had a better personal understanding and experience with it. Dont be afraid to write on things you might think or mundane or insignificant if you find it personally meaningful. thats what i kind of did and i really like essays that have those kinds of topics because i think it has a lot of potential to be more personal and interesting than broad topics. hope this helps and feel free to ask anything i didn't answer fully! gl

  • @ayatisharma1901
    @ayatisharma19014 жыл бұрын

    That was an amazing essay!

  • @haleykang8156

    @haleykang8156

    4 жыл бұрын

    yay thanks

  • @alanbchen
    @alanbchen4 жыл бұрын

    actually so helpful

  • @haleykang8156

    @haleykang8156

    4 жыл бұрын

    thanks! :)

  • @angelkaribo5056
    @angelkaribo50564 жыл бұрын

    I have just started the essay process and was wondering if I could share my essay with you. Your essay and tips were amazing and I was wondering if you could give me some advice?

  • @ninab.9380
    @ninab.93804 жыл бұрын

    this is probably the best college essay i've ever heard! also, do you still read essays and give advice? i've written a rough draft but i'm not sure if the topic is good!

  • @ninab.9380

    @ninab.9380

    4 жыл бұрын

    @@haleykang8156 thank you so much! i just shared mine!

  • @ReeseSanDiego
    @ReeseSanDiego3 жыл бұрын

    Do you have any of your original drafts? I think it would be interesting to see the progression from the beginning to the final draft!

  • @haleykang8156

    @haleykang8156

    3 жыл бұрын

    ooh thats a cool idea!

  • @ashleygustafson3471
    @ashleygustafson34713 жыл бұрын

    Not me writing this five days before the regular decision deadline.

  • @ashleygustafson3471

    @ashleygustafson3471

    3 жыл бұрын

    Honestly, I think it's because there was nothing pushing me to do it and everything has just been so... off.

  • @lohanwilliams1619

    @lohanwilliams1619

    3 жыл бұрын

    Hi Ashley, If you are struggling with writing your essays or handling your assignments, I would love to help. I'm a professional freelance writer with a vast knowledge in tackling essays and assignments in general. Feel free to email me at lohanwilliams25@gmail.com if you interested with such a service.

  • @lucymo3607
    @lucymo36073 жыл бұрын

    I started my MIT prompts but not common app yet, but this vid was so helpful, I know a bit about where to start now. Thanks!!

  • @haleykang8156

    @haleykang8156

    3 жыл бұрын

    yay that was the goal!!

  • @rebeccajohnson840
    @rebeccajohnson8403 жыл бұрын

    Y'all early deadline is in 3 days and I haven't started any of my essays... AND IM DOING THEM ALL EARLY ACTION. God help me, I have 7 college apps due

  • @haleykang8156

    @haleykang8156

    3 жыл бұрын

    shittt.. hope it went well!!!

  • @rebeccajohnson840

    @rebeccajohnson840

    3 жыл бұрын

    @@haleykang8156 it was better than I was expecting lmao, and stayed true to my writing essays the day of. I didn’t start my common app until November 1st 🥲

  • @wolfmangoland7972
    @wolfmangoland79722 жыл бұрын

    Wow!!! beautiful masterpiece. My essay will never be anything like this.

  • @riyasoth8798
    @riyasoth87983 жыл бұрын

    Thank you so much! Just like and subscribe.This is super helpful. Plz plz so more college essay!

  • @haleykang8156

    @haleykang8156

    3 жыл бұрын

    thanks sm!

  • @colinmurphy2214
    @colinmurphy22143 жыл бұрын

    Literally a perfect essay

  • @haleykang8156

    @haleykang8156

    3 жыл бұрын

    :o

  • @emilyzhu3621
    @emilyzhu36213 жыл бұрын

    yo the essay is soo good wth

  • @haleykang8156

    @haleykang8156

    3 жыл бұрын

    :D thank youu

  • @pertempus
    @pertempus3 жыл бұрын

    Would it be too much to write an essay on how much you love the topic that you are applying for (as your major)? For example, if you apply for film, you need to submit a short film and other supplemental materials. Would an essay on film be too repetitive?

  • @thomasj5042
    @thomasj50424 жыл бұрын

    Hey!!! I loved your essay and I wrote one with the same prompt because I had an idea that didn’t quite fit any of the other prompts lol. UPenn is my dream school and I was wondering if you had anytime to look over mine and give me some tips. It would mean a lot!!

  • @brendanye330
    @brendanye3304 жыл бұрын

    Well written essay, I’m a rising senior in high school and was wondering if you could look over my college essay and make any suggestions

  • @jocelynvo7134
    @jocelynvo71343 жыл бұрын

    me starting my essay the day before early decision is due

  • @shaquai

    @shaquai

    3 жыл бұрын

    same brooo

  • @jaylasteward9304

    @jaylasteward9304

    3 жыл бұрын

    same i don’t know why i always do this to myself😫

  • @Natural1ntelligence

    @Natural1ntelligence

    3 жыл бұрын

    Bruh same lawd help me

  • @haleykang8156

    @haleykang8156

    3 жыл бұрын

    lolll i hope it went well guys

  • @lohanwilliams1619

    @lohanwilliams1619

    3 жыл бұрын

    Hi friends, In future if you find yourself struggling to writing an essay or hande your assignments, I would love to help. I'm a professional freelance writer with a vast knowledge in tackling essays and assignments in general. Feel free to email me at lohanwilliams25@gmail.com if you interested with such a service.

  • @jahnvisingh8062
    @jahnvisingh80624 жыл бұрын

    the intro was lit

  • @haleykang8156

    @haleykang8156

    4 жыл бұрын

    lol thanks

  • @jambohanumsp3684
    @jambohanumsp36844 жыл бұрын

    I loved this :) Question: How do you get motivated to start?

  • @haleykang8156

    @haleykang8156

    4 жыл бұрын

    aw thanks :) honestly, i had the same problem and my parents pushed me to start in august last year haha. the way i somewhat motivated myself last summer was by telling myself i was going to put in the same amount of time into it regardless of when i start. if i didn't spend 2 hours at the moment working on my essays, i would end up spending two hours on it at a later time when i would probably be a lot busier with ec's and hw which would have been a lot more stressful. hopefully, you'll be able to do what i WISH i did and avoid my mistakes because i ended up having many restless days and nights the weeks leading up to the deadlines because i had to start and finish a lot of my essays in a short period of time.

  • @jambohanumsp3684

    @jambohanumsp3684

    4 жыл бұрын

    haley kang thanks for this reply :) i just finished junior year about 2 days ago and i’m really trying to motivate myself to start. i have so many ideas but it’s just a matter right now of putting my thoughts and ideas onto paper

  • @haleykang8156

    @haleykang8156

    4 жыл бұрын

    honestly, you have so much time haha. i didn't even start thinking about it until probably late june or early july after junior year. don't stress too much about it right now! also on the jumble of thoughts, i felt the same way and i somewhat organized them by writing everything, whether or not it makes sense, down and to go from there!

  • @jambohanumsp3684

    @jambohanumsp3684

    4 жыл бұрын

    @@haleykang8156 okay, thank you so much for your help! :)

  • @tracywaiyeeshi8150
    @tracywaiyeeshi81504 жыл бұрын

    I would love to share my essay with my friends and teachers but I'm low-key scared that my friends might take my essay qwq

  • @haleykang8156

    @haleykang8156

    4 жыл бұрын

    lol that doesn't seem like a very friend-like thing to do

  • @Abby-oo8kw

    @Abby-oo8kw

    3 жыл бұрын

    @@rosejoyce67 exactly!! don't show it to your friends especially if you're applying to the same college, desperation can make people jealous and crazy

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