Based on the feedback I received on the first version of this collaboration, I turned up the vocals, changed my channel's name to something less ambiguous, added a piano outro to wrap everything up, and made the intro a little snappier, so here's the second draft of a collaboration that I was working on with my friend, unfortunately he's no longer on KZread and I'm not sure if he will ever share this video with anyone, regardless some of his viewers have found my channel through the first draft of this song and at about 800 views, the original is by far my most successful piece of music so far.