I spend hours playing with action/description format. Specifically in regards to general scene description versus characters versus interactions with objects from the description, what order to introduce and how to space it all…. It’s driving me insane
@user-wh4lx9by2o8 күн бұрын
Good tips, but it took you almost two-and-a-half minutes to get to the first example. That's 20% of the entire video devoted to introduction and setup. You can do better than that. Less YOU and more content, please.
@BlabbermouthRex12 күн бұрын
There's nothing wrong with the lead-in descriptions as long as you introduce those two characters during interactions. There are many ways to describe a character and one effective method is by having them >show< you who they are by their behaviour, instead of narration >telling< you without that behaviour. You can't ignore the many coloured ways we artists write.
@Cinnovations14 күн бұрын
I don’t want to get into Hollywood or make a blockbuster, I want to write and produce a really unique and satisfying short for an audience.
@nighthiker887214 күн бұрын
I think a "Soap Animation" would work GREAT, on YT. 20-minutes, 3-days Aweek.
@nighthiker887214 күн бұрын
THAT WHO YOU SHOULD BE FOCUSING ON, TELL OUTDATED, HOLLYWOOD GOOD-BYB!
@nighthiker887214 күн бұрын
TAKE An IDEA, THEN give it the complete opposite.
@nighthiker887214 күн бұрын
25 of the YT- commercials SUCK, because their ONLY MADE TO GET A "YES" from the owner of the company. IF YOUR SKILL, MAKE A COMMERCIAL.
@nighthiker887214 күн бұрын
Most people know ZORO, and afraid get bullet proof! THEY MAY HAVE one piece of the PIZZA. I SEE ALOT CRUSH AND BURN. AND TODAY you can do it in AI, or animation. I SEE video that are great. A LOT OF GARBAGE OF COPIES OF A COPY.
@InformantNet17 күн бұрын
Honesty isn't always the best policy. It's objectively weird that you have pen ink on your tongue. What you should have said is that you had a blue raspberry Jolly Rancher just before you made this video because now the only thing on my mind is how you could possibly get ink on your tongue.
@mrman88023 күн бұрын
Great details
@robertruffo213424 күн бұрын
Some screenwriting gurus are lunatics. Many classic films have phone conversations in them, as well as recent, high budget ones. The real advice is don't use phone conversations if you can substitute a face-to-face, but gurus always take things to extremes to support some invented dogma they are clinging to. BTW though "EXT." stands for "Exterior" not "External". In line production "External" means supplied-by-third-party footage, "exterior" means outdoors.
@johnwashingtonjr.727624 күн бұрын
THANK YOU....FANTASTIC JOB!!!
@user-ym7hw5ee7l28 күн бұрын
did you fired your colorist?
@user-ov1is3kp7dАй бұрын
This is so helpful ❤
@user-ov1is3kp7dАй бұрын
God bless you for this
@MahayanaIDugastАй бұрын
The best video / explanation read thus far, after a week of research, try and miss (and almost crying ... lol) thank you for your time, effort and offering: TOTALLY AWESOME!
@robsandoval9677Ай бұрын
One key to a good query is the story's concept/logline. If you have a fresh take on a familiar genre, you'll probably get requests to read the script. Got lucky with a script like that and found an agent for it through a cold query and he got it optioned quickly & eventually sold it. So cold queries can work.
@genapruitt2421Ай бұрын
Thank you! 😁
@livehappy6118Ай бұрын
I don't care she's famous or not. Because Quentin Tarantino or Others Famous Screen writers whould't did what she did to share knowledge for beginner like us
@mymentalasylumugandaАй бұрын
your advice has been so helpful. i have been struggling with basics of how to write a perfect dramedy. thank you.
@tutubeas10Ай бұрын
Thank you very much, man. I must confess that when I saw your dishevelled appearance and you started talking, I thought I was about to waste my time here. But your content is amazing and very useful. And I re-learned to never judge a book by its cover.
@Miniweet9167Ай бұрын
I wrote a show I wanted to see.
@kesol1875Ай бұрын
Very informative video
@snowflake7382Ай бұрын
you are soo nice
@user-rs4gr9yq4uАй бұрын
Thank you for this info, it's really helped me in the current script that I am writing.
@artistjim1142 ай бұрын
Awesome video! This super helpful for me-being that I’m a visual artist who’s trying his hand at script writing.
@braxtonm97122 ай бұрын
Im glad Jonathan Majors is helping screen writers after getting fired from Marvel
@futurestoryteller2 ай бұрын
It should be noted that this definition of show don't tell is only useful for screenwriters, is not a comprehensive definition of the term, and may in fact have some vague detriments even to the craft of screenwriting. Other ways to say show don't tell: Describe do not explain. Dramatize don't summarize. Don't tell me what to think, give me something to think about.
@MTB_Rider_962 ай бұрын
Very helpful video, thanks. I finished my first SiFi screenplay in 2015 then pitched it to Rat Pack Entertainment and had a professional review/edit. Then life got too busy to focus on it (because I have a very successful career in the Medical Devices industry), however, now I'm dusting it off and getting serious about selling/marketing my screenplay. Thanks for all the advice here!
@g-lyves57432 ай бұрын
You dropped so many jewels here. Much appreciated.
@josepablolopovich48032 ай бұрын
THANKS A LOT FOR YOUR ADVICES BEST WISHES FROM MEXICO $!!!
@josepablolopovich48032 ай бұрын
THANKS FOR ALL YOUR SUPPORT !!!! I DO LIKE PROFOUNDLY THE WAY YOU EXPRESS YOUR SELF !!!!!!! SALUDOS DE MEXICO MY FRIEND !!! GOD BLESS YOU ALWAYS !!!!!!!
@NickNintendo19852 ай бұрын
Great video! Thank you for the valuable information. :)
@judichristopher46042 ай бұрын
8:49 EXCELLENT EXAMPLE I was always told 5 paragraphes... This is a perfect example.
@judichristopher46042 ай бұрын
Corrections... I was told 5 ACTS
@LarryButchins2 ай бұрын
Depends on what you're pitching: a TV series or a feature. A feature is traditionally 3 acts (but it could be more depending on your content/plot). A series is obviously longer, but what you were told about 5 paragraphs is part of the structure of a good PowerPoint presentation (which is the best way to present your pitch, I believe) - essentially each slide should be no longer than 5 paragraphs *bullet points) each of 5 words! If you can achieve that, it's concise and to the point.
@judichristopher46042 ай бұрын
@@LarryButchins Excellent points... but When doing a Series Bible and you're describing each main character... only using 5 words I think would be hard to do.
@judichristopher46042 ай бұрын
EXCELLENT VIDEO... Thank you for sharing this video Question: Would I also do the same thing if I was writing a Limited MiniSeries?
@downrock.creative2 ай бұрын
Really great tips, thanks! I’m looking forward to checking out more of your content.
@macruise2 ай бұрын
awesome - thanks
@bluerabbit12362 ай бұрын
How's that an exterior road scene when someone is in the car driving 😂 What about the present continuous tense? All that telling and no showing 😬 And you are saying this is a great scrip? No professional who sees that will read further. It's okay when Judd Appatow does it. It's NOT okay when a no name amateur does it. People who have never sold anything teaching amateurs a bunch of nonsense and they're all buying this bs.
@dovescry272 ай бұрын
Very informative
@georgevillalba28102 ай бұрын
One thing that will help you be good at writing dialogue is being a good listener. Go to the mall, park , subway and listen how people talk, you could even record conversations and analyze them later. Some learn to write good dialogue, some are just gifted.
@EnjoyingLife20242 ай бұрын
I have a script idea for a Netflix kdrama series, "Ssaessng". It's a Korean version of the USA series, "Swarm." TY for the great info!😂😂😂😢
@slicknicv13622 ай бұрын
❤ God Bless All Much Love To All Be Blessed To All Happy Easter 🐣 ❤
@BodyTrust3 ай бұрын
Super video. Thank you! I've decided to continue following my dream instead of settling for a boring job!
@karencrider48943 ай бұрын
Great advice. Thanks...
@ColinCollard3 ай бұрын
The “first page” of your presentation was like a bad first page of a script. You rambled on and on about why a first page is important. Why didn’t you simply lead with a first page from one of the scripts? That way you would have got my attention right away. Afterwards you could have followed it up with why it was good, huh?
@GROOVYEG3 ай бұрын
I'm sorry, but- you are gorgeous. Please. Please, teach me all about screenwriting. Lou's character description comes so far down the page though. My only problem with it
@sumirsookdeo94433 ай бұрын
Tell my dumb supervisor stop altering it and changing his mind.
@Taboweither6973 ай бұрын
I just recently started using outlines on my first script. I like it, but you answer your question. I normally just start writing skip most of the preparation work.
@hansjansen91883 ай бұрын
Holy shit, your college girl accent suck the life out of me grow up.
@subhashchandra24383 ай бұрын
super
@ZenHulk3 ай бұрын
ALL BS. Hang out in coffee shops, you must live in LA, so what's the other 260 million of us to do. I read a how to start you're ow business once in like 1988 you sound like you're reading it. You even sound so generic about this, i wondered why so many film students make their own movies, and why animation s blowing up, to avoid harassing a producer why he drinks his latte, do you all just line up at their tables to hump their legs. Man someone needs to write a movie on the coffee shop leg humpers.
@meltoncomics4 ай бұрын
How many Scripps have you sold? That was very successful
Пікірлер
I spend hours playing with action/description format. Specifically in regards to general scene description versus characters versus interactions with objects from the description, what order to introduce and how to space it all…. It’s driving me insane
Good tips, but it took you almost two-and-a-half minutes to get to the first example. That's 20% of the entire video devoted to introduction and setup. You can do better than that. Less YOU and more content, please.
There's nothing wrong with the lead-in descriptions as long as you introduce those two characters during interactions. There are many ways to describe a character and one effective method is by having them >show< you who they are by their behaviour, instead of narration >telling< you without that behaviour. You can't ignore the many coloured ways we artists write.
I don’t want to get into Hollywood or make a blockbuster, I want to write and produce a really unique and satisfying short for an audience.
I think a "Soap Animation" would work GREAT, on YT. 20-minutes, 3-days Aweek.
THAT WHO YOU SHOULD BE FOCUSING ON, TELL OUTDATED, HOLLYWOOD GOOD-BYB!
TAKE An IDEA, THEN give it the complete opposite.
25 of the YT- commercials SUCK, because their ONLY MADE TO GET A "YES" from the owner of the company. IF YOUR SKILL, MAKE A COMMERCIAL.
Most people know ZORO, and afraid get bullet proof! THEY MAY HAVE one piece of the PIZZA. I SEE ALOT CRUSH AND BURN. AND TODAY you can do it in AI, or animation. I SEE video that are great. A LOT OF GARBAGE OF COPIES OF A COPY.
Honesty isn't always the best policy. It's objectively weird that you have pen ink on your tongue. What you should have said is that you had a blue raspberry Jolly Rancher just before you made this video because now the only thing on my mind is how you could possibly get ink on your tongue.
Great details
Some screenwriting gurus are lunatics. Many classic films have phone conversations in them, as well as recent, high budget ones. The real advice is don't use phone conversations if you can substitute a face-to-face, but gurus always take things to extremes to support some invented dogma they are clinging to. BTW though "EXT." stands for "Exterior" not "External". In line production "External" means supplied-by-third-party footage, "exterior" means outdoors.
THANK YOU....FANTASTIC JOB!!!
did you fired your colorist?
This is so helpful ❤
God bless you for this
The best video / explanation read thus far, after a week of research, try and miss (and almost crying ... lol) thank you for your time, effort and offering: TOTALLY AWESOME!
One key to a good query is the story's concept/logline. If you have a fresh take on a familiar genre, you'll probably get requests to read the script. Got lucky with a script like that and found an agent for it through a cold query and he got it optioned quickly & eventually sold it. So cold queries can work.
Thank you! 😁
I don't care she's famous or not. Because Quentin Tarantino or Others Famous Screen writers whould't did what she did to share knowledge for beginner like us
your advice has been so helpful. i have been struggling with basics of how to write a perfect dramedy. thank you.
Thank you very much, man. I must confess that when I saw your dishevelled appearance and you started talking, I thought I was about to waste my time here. But your content is amazing and very useful. And I re-learned to never judge a book by its cover.
I wrote a show I wanted to see.
Very informative video
you are soo nice
Thank you for this info, it's really helped me in the current script that I am writing.
Awesome video! This super helpful for me-being that I’m a visual artist who’s trying his hand at script writing.
Im glad Jonathan Majors is helping screen writers after getting fired from Marvel
It should be noted that this definition of show don't tell is only useful for screenwriters, is not a comprehensive definition of the term, and may in fact have some vague detriments even to the craft of screenwriting. Other ways to say show don't tell: Describe do not explain. Dramatize don't summarize. Don't tell me what to think, give me something to think about.
Very helpful video, thanks. I finished my first SiFi screenplay in 2015 then pitched it to Rat Pack Entertainment and had a professional review/edit. Then life got too busy to focus on it (because I have a very successful career in the Medical Devices industry), however, now I'm dusting it off and getting serious about selling/marketing my screenplay. Thanks for all the advice here!
You dropped so many jewels here. Much appreciated.
THANKS A LOT FOR YOUR ADVICES BEST WISHES FROM MEXICO $!!!
THANKS FOR ALL YOUR SUPPORT !!!! I DO LIKE PROFOUNDLY THE WAY YOU EXPRESS YOUR SELF !!!!!!! SALUDOS DE MEXICO MY FRIEND !!! GOD BLESS YOU ALWAYS !!!!!!!
Great video! Thank you for the valuable information. :)
8:49 EXCELLENT EXAMPLE I was always told 5 paragraphes... This is a perfect example.
Corrections... I was told 5 ACTS
Depends on what you're pitching: a TV series or a feature. A feature is traditionally 3 acts (but it could be more depending on your content/plot). A series is obviously longer, but what you were told about 5 paragraphs is part of the structure of a good PowerPoint presentation (which is the best way to present your pitch, I believe) - essentially each slide should be no longer than 5 paragraphs *bullet points) each of 5 words! If you can achieve that, it's concise and to the point.
@@LarryButchins Excellent points... but When doing a Series Bible and you're describing each main character... only using 5 words I think would be hard to do.
EXCELLENT VIDEO... Thank you for sharing this video Question: Would I also do the same thing if I was writing a Limited MiniSeries?
Really great tips, thanks! I’m looking forward to checking out more of your content.
awesome - thanks
How's that an exterior road scene when someone is in the car driving 😂 What about the present continuous tense? All that telling and no showing 😬 And you are saying this is a great scrip? No professional who sees that will read further. It's okay when Judd Appatow does it. It's NOT okay when a no name amateur does it. People who have never sold anything teaching amateurs a bunch of nonsense and they're all buying this bs.
Very informative
One thing that will help you be good at writing dialogue is being a good listener. Go to the mall, park , subway and listen how people talk, you could even record conversations and analyze them later. Some learn to write good dialogue, some are just gifted.
I have a script idea for a Netflix kdrama series, "Ssaessng". It's a Korean version of the USA series, "Swarm." TY for the great info!😂😂😂😢
❤ God Bless All Much Love To All Be Blessed To All Happy Easter 🐣 ❤
Super video. Thank you! I've decided to continue following my dream instead of settling for a boring job!
Great advice. Thanks...
The “first page” of your presentation was like a bad first page of a script. You rambled on and on about why a first page is important. Why didn’t you simply lead with a first page from one of the scripts? That way you would have got my attention right away. Afterwards you could have followed it up with why it was good, huh?
I'm sorry, but- you are gorgeous. Please. Please, teach me all about screenwriting. Lou's character description comes so far down the page though. My only problem with it
Tell my dumb supervisor stop altering it and changing his mind.
I just recently started using outlines on my first script. I like it, but you answer your question. I normally just start writing skip most of the preparation work.
Holy shit, your college girl accent suck the life out of me grow up.
super
ALL BS. Hang out in coffee shops, you must live in LA, so what's the other 260 million of us to do. I read a how to start you're ow business once in like 1988 you sound like you're reading it. You even sound so generic about this, i wondered why so many film students make their own movies, and why animation s blowing up, to avoid harassing a producer why he drinks his latte, do you all just line up at their tables to hump their legs. Man someone needs to write a movie on the coffee shop leg humpers.
How many Scripps have you sold? That was very successful