the personal statement that got me into cambridge (HONEST tips + free feedback)

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(updated on: 26 july 2022)
personal statement reviews:
thank you for your support!! i am no longer accepting personal statements for free review as it is no longer manageable in my schedule. but if you are interested in my paid tutoring/personal statement review service, then please email nessaluitutor@gmail.com ! i am still tutoring to this day and i love it!
☁️🌱 timestamps 🍑
0:28 contextual information (grades, school)
1:30 reading out my personal statement
tips
5:25 starting sentences or phrases to use (examples)
9:37 structure
11:33 drafts (and how to use them)
law specific tips
12:38 what oxbridge is looking for in a law candidate
13:33 books to read & put on PS (+how to use)
15:44 work experience
17:05 misc tips
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hi everyone! this is applicable for both oxford and cambridge, but i think it will help for other universities too! durham, leeds, newcastle (i got offers from)
take care,
nessa 🥰🥰
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🍓 mentions:
what cambridge is looking for in a law student:
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@Elena Handtrack 's video:
• READING THE PERSONAL S...
@Ibz Mo 's video:
• How to Write a PERSONA...
🍞 books:
Eve was framed: amzn.to/2NLcL0G *really recommend*
Just Law: amzn.to/2Vzn7Fl
Rule of law: amzn.to/3imwL7W [currently £3.75!!!]
Justice Game: amzn.to/3ilA7Ih
Letters to a Law Student: amzn.to/3aQyu1O [no idea why this is so expensive, i would go second hand]
newnham college reading list suggestion:
www.newn.cam.ac.uk/admissions...
think cambridge law suggestions:
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*some of amazon links are affiliate links!!
🍈 work experience list for 2020-2021 a levels:
docs.google.com/document/d/14...
🌱 music:
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  • @donald6617
    @donald661711 ай бұрын

    omg i know this is 3 years old but i hit a brick wall writing my statement and you talking about personal experiences led to me cooking up just the most beautiful paragraph on exploitation and worker contracts - tysm

  • @claireisabel5953
    @claireisabel59534 жыл бұрын

    This video is going to be so helpful for everyone applying to university!! Your personal statement is beyond impressive and I'm a bit in love with your editing 😍😍

  • @NessaLui

    @NessaLui

    4 жыл бұрын

    CLAIRE 🥺🥺 YOU ARE THE SWEETEST thank you. i literally smile so much at all your comments 💜💜

  • @anniel1668
    @anniel16684 жыл бұрын

    Thank you so much for posting this! The first draft of my personal statement is due next week and i had no idea where to start, your video was super informative and friendly and i’m actually excited to start writing it now :))

  • @NessaLui

    @NessaLui

    4 жыл бұрын

    thank YOU! i'm so glad!! 🥰🥰 i'm sure you'll do great 🥳

  • @natalieseah2007
    @natalieseah20073 жыл бұрын

    thank you for this super useful video :") been kinda struggling with writing a personal statement, this has helped me so much... love ur warm, bright, bubbly energy too hehhe

  • @anya5567
    @anya55673 жыл бұрын

    hey nessa your video is brilliantly made!! love it 💖

  • @farahfarique1537
    @farahfarique15372 жыл бұрын

    I literally in love with you like you are so kind and this has been so helpful ❤️💐

  • @sandratansh
    @sandratansh3 жыл бұрын

    hey! just wanted to thank you for making such an informative video. it’s really helpful for me, and i’m sure for other students as well!!

  • @elloloo3344
    @elloloo3344 Жыл бұрын

    This is an amazing video!! You are one of the most insightful and useful KZreadrs I have found to help with university applications :)

  • @NessaLui

    @NessaLui

    Жыл бұрын

    im so glad it helps!!!

  • @Daniel-tp4ue
    @Daniel-tp4ue3 жыл бұрын

    Thankyouuuuuu!!!! It's very helpful😭❤❤

  • @softglow9
    @softglow92 жыл бұрын

    I am so thankful I came across this video, it was really eye-opening and very helpful!

  • @emilycarter8922

    @emilycarter8922

    2 жыл бұрын

    You might want to check this out kzread.info/dash/bejne/Z46JybZuk8q6l5M.html

  • @bibliophilogy
    @bibliophilogy4 жыл бұрын

    I'm here yay 😍😍 another upload!! I don't know why but you make me wanna study law too 😂 and I'm not even doing law in a levels 🤡 but this is going to be so helpful when I apply uni! Thank youuuu nessa 😍❤️❤️

  • @NessaLui

    @NessaLui

    4 жыл бұрын

    aww meg!! thank you AND i didn't do law at a levels either, it's not necessary! thank you for watching hehe

  • @dima-belle9170
    @dima-belle91703 жыл бұрын

    This is so helpful! Thank you!

  • @brat6359
    @brat63593 жыл бұрын

    Wow this tips is realy helpful thank u💗

  • @dani.f.1264
    @dani.f.12643 жыл бұрын

    This is the FIRST out of countless videos I've watched that has actually helped me. You don't know how helpful you are. I noticed you said you're no longer accepting PS. Are you accepting them now(once I follow through with the steps of course)? If you are, I haven't written mine yet, but hope to do so VERY soon and I REALLY need your help. I really hope you respond. I'd be so grateful!❤❤

  • @ShaniaShelton
    @ShaniaShelton4 жыл бұрын

    This is so insightful for people looking to get into Cambridge (or anywhere haha)!!

  • @NessaLui

    @NessaLui

    4 жыл бұрын

    thank you!!😊 im glad you think so haha i was a mess filming this

  • @laurenmoore2059
    @laurenmoore20594 жыл бұрын

    This video was so useful! I’ll be writing my personal statement for law over this summer and would love some feedback once I have finished.

  • @NessaLui

    @NessaLui

    4 жыл бұрын

    thank you so much 🥰🌈 i'm excited to read your PS!

  • @nikola206

    @nikola206

    4 жыл бұрын

    lauren moore if you need any advice I’d love to help! I start at Oxford this autumn and I know just how hard it’s been for next years applicants to get the help they need from their schools, or even just getting decent feedback. If you need advice or feedback my email is lochlandpoppy@gmail.com. Best of luck with your application Lauren!

  • @c2seme

    @c2seme

    2 жыл бұрын

    Did you get in??

  • @Destiny-yd2uh
    @Destiny-yd2uh3 жыл бұрын

    This video was soo useful, thanks for sharing, and will send you my personal statement for feedback. Thanks 😊

  • @macs7404
    @macs74043 жыл бұрын

    Thank you very much for the tips and information given. Especially reading out your own personal statement, so others can see the high quality of excellence required. I'll definitely be emailing you my personal statement sometime, if you have the time of course, so you can rip it apart. Thanks :)

  • @meenakshim6610
    @meenakshim66104 жыл бұрын

    literally binge-watching all your videos, and well, you now have a new subscriber! i’m applying to cambridge soon and i would love for you to read my personal statement draft, if that’s possible. p.s you’re doing some great work, and also, love the editing🤩

  • @nikola206

    @nikola206

    4 жыл бұрын

    Meenakshi M hi I can give you feedback and advice your personal statement if you like, my email is lochlandpoppy@gmail.com I’m starting at Oxford this autumn and I’m currently helping a few people with their ps so one more would be no problem. Best of luck with your application xx

  • @NessaLui

    @NessaLui

    4 жыл бұрын

    aww that makes smile thankyou!!💗 yes ofc!! < 3

  • @rosie6
    @rosie62 жыл бұрын

    Where did u get the bear cup? It’s sooo cute and also huge huge congratulations!

  • @dorothyrajagukguk
    @dorothyrajagukguk Жыл бұрын

    Thank youu!

  • @harryarmstrong2002
    @harryarmstrong20024 жыл бұрын

    Thanks so much, Nessa! I would be so grateful if you could make a video on the Cambridge Law Test?

  • @NessaLui

    @NessaLui

    4 жыл бұрын

    thank you for watching!! 🥰. yes! i plan to make that soon ☺️

  • @NessaLui

    @NessaLui

    4 жыл бұрын

    hi harry! i (re)uploaded the video just now! hope it helps :)

  • @ielts3022
    @ielts30223 жыл бұрын

    It’s so motivational to see ur video. Thank you a lot. I’m still so worried about my gpa. How much gpa is needed to be accepted to llm in cambridge?

  • @nabihahzinn
    @nabihahzinn3 жыл бұрын

    This video is really helpful! Really hope you will be accepting personal statement feedback soon as I am currently writing mine right now. ☺️☺️

  • @laurynroberts4227
    @laurynroberts42274 жыл бұрын

    thank you for posting this! will definitely revisit when it’s time to write my own, i’m going into year 12 this year and just wondering what subjects did you study at a-level if it’s okay for me to ask?💕

  • @NessaLui

    @NessaLui

    4 жыл бұрын

    thank you for watching 🥰. i studied maths, biology, psychology and did an EPQ!

  • @chq2252
    @chq2252 Жыл бұрын

    ahhh the reviews are no longer available :C I'm currently struggling with writing mine haha... I'm an international student and I want to try my hand at applying to my dream school :D It's so amazing how you can write so eloquently! I did realise that I left myself very little time to prepare for the LNAT and writing my PS ( I wish I decided to give applying to oxbridge a try earlier hhh) however I am determined to just try my best and if I get in, wow, amazing, and if not, at least I know I gave it a shot! Thank you for the tips! 我会努力加油的😆

  • @mitchmalvin4374
    @mitchmalvin43744 жыл бұрын

    Hi Nessa! I have been a big fan of your videos as they have been really helpful. I just sent an email to you regarding my personal statement hehe. Your help is really appreciated!!

  • @NessaLui

    @NessaLui

    4 жыл бұрын

    awww thank you 🥰 will send u my feedback before sept!!

  • @aleenaalam8643
    @aleenaalam86432 жыл бұрын

    Do you have to submit your gcses / igcse grades?

  • @Sam-cz7bu
    @Sam-cz7bu Жыл бұрын

    Hey...how many days have you spent in writing your personal statement? I'll be applying to law schools this year and a reply from you will be highly appreciated! :D

  • @ly-rj2bv
    @ly-rj2bv2 жыл бұрын

    did you not have a character limit? that seemed quite a lot for 4000 characters including space? I couldn't fit in everything i wanted 😭😭

  • @parthp9595
    @parthp95954 жыл бұрын

    Hey Nessa, awesome video, thanks so much! I'm wondering what you would suggest writing in the 80% academic side because most of my strengths lie in my experiences such as moot court.

  • @NessaLui

    @NessaLui

    4 жыл бұрын

    thank you :)) i focused mine heavily on the books i've read! can also include your subjects, articles/reflections on your subject. '80% academic' is just focusing on your subject and discussing it :)

  • @parthp9595

    @parthp9595

    4 жыл бұрын

    @@NessaLui hmmm can I discuss an article by a law review? Also thanks so much, you have been so helpful!

  • @NessaLui

    @NessaLui

    4 жыл бұрын

    @@parthp9595 if you can link the article to your own passion etc. then yes!! treat it as though you were discussing a book :) + ☺️☺️ im so glad!!

  • @MalaakStage
    @MalaakStage Жыл бұрын

    this was very helpful thanks a lot!

  • @sanjanachoudhary5051
    @sanjanachoudhary50514 жыл бұрын

    I'm so much looking forward for you to to read my first draft of personal statement!

  • @NessaLui

    @NessaLui

    4 жыл бұрын

    i'm looking forward to reading it! 💜☺️🥳

  • @imanirfanullah2801
    @imanirfanullah28012 жыл бұрын

    Hey! By any chance are you accepting drafts for feedback right now ?

  • @awfulbaby29
    @awfulbaby294 жыл бұрын

    awesome video omg thanks so much! Is it okay if i send you my personal statement when i finish it in the next few weeks? xx

  • @NessaLui

    @NessaLui

    4 жыл бұрын

    yes!!! ❤

  • @maisharahman532
    @maisharahman5322 жыл бұрын

    is it alright if I send in my personal statement still? I need help especially because as an international student nobody can help me here ;-;

  • @natashadavey7988
    @natashadavey79883 жыл бұрын

    Thank you so much for doing a video like this, and in so much detail. I’m planning to apply to Cambridge to study Geography in just a few weeks now, and literally panicking about my personal statement. I’ve done 4 drafts in total so far, but my teachers are currently not replying to their emails because it’s the holidays??? So only my mum has read it and given me advice. I’d love for you to have a look at it so I’ll drop you an email 😊💕

  • @solefreakks7905

    @solefreakks7905

    2 жыл бұрын

    Did you get in?

  • @NayilC
    @NayilC3 жыл бұрын

    This video was super helpful thank you! Would it be okay if I emailed you my personal statement?

  • @cheryl868
    @cheryl8684 жыл бұрын

    this video is really helpful and you seem really sweet hehe 🥺 I really wanna study law in cambridge as well but with my GCSEs grades, i probably won't be able to 😔

  • @NessaLui

    @NessaLui

    4 жыл бұрын

    NO!!! still apply! your gcse grades are genuinely not the be all end all (you don't need all As/A*s to get an offer). you can do it, don't give up. your gcses are only one part of their considerations, you have so much more (ie a level predictions, teachers reference, your ps and interview) 😊😊😊 +thank you awww < 3

  • @cheryl868

    @cheryl868

    4 жыл бұрын

    @@NessaLui that is really reassuring! one of my biggest regrets is probably not working hard enough for GCSEs, but I'll have to do my best for alevels,, I'm really looking forward to your new videos btw! 💘

  • @NessaLui

    @NessaLui

    4 жыл бұрын

    @@cheryl868 you can do it 🥰🥰❤ thank you for your support 🥺

  • @sokmai9977
    @sokmai99774 жыл бұрын

    Like your video ❤️❤️

  • @belindatan7890
    @belindatan78902 жыл бұрын

    May I know why didn't want to go Durham uni?

  • @dilyarakenzhegaliyeva9974
    @dilyarakenzhegaliyeva99743 жыл бұрын

    Hi, Nessa! Are you still not accepting personal statements? I have a really not normal situation and still applying (can explain better via email). Can you please take a look at my essay? Im an international student from Kazakhstan. BS from USC.

  • @isd99
    @isd994 жыл бұрын

    Wow! That was helpful, I was born in India and move to the uk

  • @NessaLui

    @NessaLui

    4 жыл бұрын

    i'm so glad!! i'm sure your PS will turn out great 🥳

  • @pofiuzbusinessman
    @pofiuzbusinessman2 жыл бұрын

    hi! do you still read personal statements?🥺

  • @elizabethdavy4057
    @elizabethdavy40574 жыл бұрын

    I would really love if you could take a look at my personal statement Nessa. Thank you so much!! x

  • @NessaLui

    @NessaLui

    4 жыл бұрын

    🥰🧡🧡

  • @user-jr4lj9hr7t
    @user-jr4lj9hr7t7 ай бұрын

    Hey sister, can you help me with my PS?

  • @ifeoluwaadeniyi6598
    @ifeoluwaadeniyi6598 Жыл бұрын

    Hello ❤️. Thank you this was helpful. I have this rough sketch kind of and I don’t know how you may help in reviewing it. Thank you❤️. Do you have an active email I can send it through to😂❤️

  • @harryarmstrong2002
    @harryarmstrong20023 жыл бұрын

    Hi Nessa, I saw this video a while ago but hadn't fully written my personal statement. If you have the time, I would really appreciate any feedback. Thank you so much!

  • @millie7289
    @millie72894 жыл бұрын

    You’re the first youtuber whose personal statement video has made me feel much more at ease about writing it... thank you ! The only thing I’m worried about is work experience, since I have none and any scheduled was cancelled due to COVID:( is it useful to watch Supreme Court live-streams and examine these court cases and talk about it in my PT? I’ve read a few books, am in a law society at college but I don’t have much experience at all so I’m struggling with what to do whilst we are in lockdown :/

  • @NessaLui

    @NessaLui

    4 жыл бұрын

    i'm happy you feel more at ease 🥰 thank you for your kind words. for work experience, don't worry about it! honestly it's just ONE out of the MANY ways you can show your passion - and i only mentioned my work experience in like 2 sentences on the PS. :) i would suggest looking at virtual internships, can be useful! SC livestreams could be interesting, but to examine them in your PS might be too complex. you can talk about those books to keep your PS academic!! and you can also talk about the skills you gained from your society. key point is to not just describe what you did/the event, but focus more on the skills you gained from it :). you can also use your a level subjects to show what qualities you have as a candidate!! dont worry too much about the work experience 🥰 many dont have it! and its completely okay

  • @millie7289

    @millie7289

    4 жыл бұрын

    nessa lui would be talking about how leading my law society be useful, how I headed debates on complex topics and my EPQ on capital punishment vs life sentence be useful to discuss too, as well as my books and subjects? Is this enough for my academic section??

  • @millie7289

    @millie7289

    4 жыл бұрын

    nessa lui but than you so much you’re so sweet!! you’re so kind for taking time out to help :)

  • @NessaLui

    @NessaLui

    4 жыл бұрын

    @@millie7289 i think that sounds perfect for your academic section ☺️☺️!! its more than enough as long as you use them well :))) you got this!

  • @millie7289

    @millie7289

    4 жыл бұрын

    nessa lui thank you so much ! Honestly I really needed to hear someone say this since I’ve been reading examples from lots of overly privileged students who have done every type of work experience under the sun and I felt really inadequate with what I have. Thank you so much, you’ve eased my anxiety more than you could know :)

  • @kiarapinto8884
    @kiarapinto88842 жыл бұрын

    hey! I know it's been like two years but I'm applying to Oxford this October and I was wondering if you'd still be able and interested in reading my personal statement. I really enjoyed this video, it was defintely one of the most helpful, so I'm very glad I've found your channel!

  • @NessaLui

    @NessaLui

    2 жыл бұрын

    hello!! im no longer doing free reviews but will review for a fee same as all the other students i currently have :) please email nessaluitutor@gmail.com if you are still interested! 😊

  • @justabrittoday

    @justabrittoday

    2 жыл бұрын

    I’m applying to Oxford in September and I would love to exchange and talk about our personal statements as well! It would be nice to have someone going through the process at the same me.

  • @kiarapinto8884

    @kiarapinto8884

    2 жыл бұрын

    @@justabrittoday that sounds amazing! I would love to

  • @bethany1900
    @bethany19003 жыл бұрын

    Which monthly law masterclasses did you do? Xx

  • @user-jr4lj9hr7t
    @user-jr4lj9hr7t7 ай бұрын

    Where can my personal statement be reviewed for free!?

  • @user-cx8lj6nl6c
    @user-cx8lj6nl6c8 күн бұрын

    I wish you can review my personal statement 😢

  • @trinamitra9805
    @trinamitra98054 жыл бұрын

    I'd definitely like some help with the personal statement!

  • @NessaLui

    @NessaLui

    4 жыл бұрын

    🥰

  • @nikola206

    @nikola206

    4 жыл бұрын

    Trina Mitra if you need any advice I’d love to help! I start at Oxford this autumn and I know just how hard it’s been for next years applicants to get the help they need from their schools, or even just getting decent feedback. If you need advice or feedback my email is lochlandpoppy@gmail.com. Best of luck with your application Trina!

  • @samira-cm1oe
    @samira-cm1oe3 жыл бұрын

    hii im gonna send you my first draft please🙈

  • @rajaaalwodai5745
    @rajaaalwodai574510 ай бұрын

    Hi Nessa, I’m currently doing my MRes personal statement and I came across your video. I’m wondering if you’ll be willing to have a look and give me feedback? Thanks

  • @ThePinkprincessrose
    @ThePinkprincessrose4 жыл бұрын

    This was incredibly helpful! I'd be extremely grateful if you could read my personal statement too x

  • @NessaLui

    @NessaLui

    4 жыл бұрын

    ofc!!💛

  • @sofiasolanki7839
    @sofiasolanki78394 жыл бұрын

    Hiya Nessa, brilliant video (as always!) I am writing my personal statement for Law this Summer and some feedback would be very much appreciated!!

  • @NessaLui

    @NessaLui

    4 жыл бұрын

    aww thank you :)) yes!!

  • @callumstevens4020
    @callumstevens40204 жыл бұрын

    I'd love to send over my current PS for feedback if that's ok 😁?

  • @NessaLui

    @NessaLui

    4 жыл бұрын

    please send it to my gmail! i will get back to you ASAP :)

  • @callumstevens4020

    @callumstevens4020

    4 жыл бұрын

    @@NessaLui thank you very much!

  • @nikola206

    @nikola206

    4 жыл бұрын

    Callum Stevens if you need any advice I’d love to help! I start at Oxford this autumn and I know just how hard it’s been for next years applicants to get the help they need from their schools, or even just getting decent feedback. If you need advice or feedback my email is lochlandpoppy@gmail.com. Best of luck with your application Callum!

  • @flavianacraznic6564
    @flavianacraznic65642 жыл бұрын

    I know you are not accepting personal statements now but I would really need some feedback pleaseee

  • @mariaa__vega
    @mariaa__vega4 жыл бұрын

    Your so pretty great statement !!!! I’m new to your channel hope we can support each other!❤️ and Im so happy for you!

  • @NessaLui

    @NessaLui

    4 жыл бұрын

    thank you!!

  • @miriamlo3699
    @miriamlo36994 жыл бұрын

    hey nessa, i'm from hong kong as well! i'd love for you to read my ps :)

  • @NessaLui

    @NessaLui

    4 жыл бұрын

    looking forward to receiving it! 😊😊

  • @emanzaidi8848
    @emanzaidi88483 жыл бұрын

    Can you please give feedback on mine please please 🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺 I’m interested to study biomedicine

  • @sairabano9770
    @sairabano97704 жыл бұрын

    Hello Nessa, I do hope you are well and keeping safe! Is it possible you could review my personal statement? I have now sent this to you via email. I would appreciate any feedback :) Thank you so very much, i really do appreciate it!

  • @nikola206

    @nikola206

    4 жыл бұрын

    Saira Bano if you need any advice I’d love to help! I start at Oxford this autumn and I know just how hard it’s been for next years applicants to get the help they need from their schools, or even just getting decent feedback. If you need advice or feedback my email is lochlandpoppy@gmail.com. Best of luck with your application Saira!

  • @sairabano9770

    @sairabano9770

    4 жыл бұрын

    @@nikola206 Hello Poppy, I do hope you are well and keeping safe! That would indeed be absolutely fantastic! Thank you so very much for your kindness :) I will of course send you an email. Thank you once again!

  • @NessaLui

    @NessaLui

    4 жыл бұрын

    hi saira!🥰 i've received your email! i've been a bit busy, but i'll get back to you asap! 💜

  • @elifcetin516
    @elifcetin5164 жыл бұрын

    I just send you an email with my Personal Statement. Looking forward to receiving your feedback ;)

  • @NessaLui

    @NessaLui

    4 жыл бұрын

    i emailed you back!!

  • @nikola206

    @nikola206

    4 жыл бұрын

    Elif Cetin if you need any advice I’d love to help! I start at Oxford this autumn and I know just how hard it’s been for next years applicants to get the help they need from their schools, or even just getting decent feedback. If you need advice or feedback my email is lochlandpoppy@gmail.com. Best of luck with your application Elif!

  • @krustytheaustralian1095
    @krustytheaustralian10953 жыл бұрын

    R u Australian?

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