"5% of people check facebook while having sex" sounds like a really catchy first line. Definitely piques one's attention lol

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Thank you for the insightful tip for finding the hook.

It was the 24 hour whelk stall at the start of Aberystwyth Mon Amour that hooked me.

@TheOxfordWriter

9 ай бұрын

Ha ha now that’s a hook so powerful it’s almost dangerous

Brilliant again. Thanks!

Wonderful, enjoyable and funny videos on writing and lots more! Thks so much 😊

@TheOxfordWriter

8 ай бұрын

Thanks for your kind words!

The Maverick beginning sounds great. I always liked the beginning of Butch Cassidy and the Sundance kid too. It's a great intro to the characters and their world.

@TheOxfordWriter

9 ай бұрын

Same screenwriter- William Goldman - for Butch Cassidy. Great movie.

You should make a video about the anti-villain spectrum. This type of villain shows remorse yet knows that his actions are absolutely necessary for the greater good. Ozymandias from the Watchmen is a great example of this. He murdered millions of innocent people to stop nuclear Armageddon.

@commandoslayer

8 ай бұрын

Another example is General Hummel from the movie The Rock, who stole some biological weapons and was planning to extort the U.S. government to pay the families of fallen marines.

Always wondered, are horses scared of rattlesnakes? I guess they would be if a bag of them was thrown at them. And there is the rattle too I guess. I've had many encounters with snakes - no rattles, Australia - while riding, even one reared up threatening to strike, horses never so much as blinked.

@TheOxfordWriter

9 ай бұрын

Good point. In the same vein, I wonder, do mice really like cheese?

I find it kind of hilarious there are people so out to lunch that they check facebook while having sex. Anything to avoid the horror that is that dastardly present moment where magic might happen and flip your world rightside up. As for opening hooks, I think the one I have in my draft is decent-ish, but Im sure when I get done with the first draft and start on the second, it'll change and get even better. Right now it's "He left it all at the edge of the wood, or at least he thought he did." That Mel Gibson hook you shared was brilliant, I'll keep it in mind for my second draft.

Great video, but the transition between whisper quiet oration and blaring intro music was jarring

@TheOxfordWriter

9 ай бұрын

Noted!

J R Tolkien? John Ronald Reuel Tolkien, J. R. R. Tolkien.

@josephcusumano2885

9 ай бұрын

Well done my friend!

As a reader I get bored very quickly if the beginning is filled with too much boring back ground and close the book. Therefore, as an author, my inciting incident is the hook. 😊

@TheOxfordWriter

25 күн бұрын

I do too, I need to sense very quickly that 'something' is afoot.

"The sky above the port was the color of television, tuned to a dead channel." "It was love at first sight. The first time Yossarian saw the chaplain he fell madly in love with him. Yossarian was in the hospital with a pain in his liver that fell just short of being jaundice."

Would you mind checking out the opening sentences to my novels? I designed them so that the hooks draw blood.

How's this? Grave robbery-how in the world did I end up in this crazy situation? It's beyond insane, but here I am, hiding in the bushes outside The Villa Diodati. Dull morning light peeks through the skeletal branches, sending all kinds of slasher movie vibes my way. Add that to stink of rotting leaves, and I can only hope someone chops me up. Anything to end this constant waiting for the fool who roped me into this ridiculous mess.

@user-cn4cz2zh9t

27 күн бұрын

Brilliant, makes me want to hear about what's next. I would immediately start at: "It's beyond insane." If I see this as a reader, I don't need to be told this is a crazy situation - I guess it. See what I mean? 😊

@user-cn4cz2zh9t

27 күн бұрын

I see now the video is not so recent. How has your novel been?

Get a lav mic. Your audio is too low. I can barely hear what you're saying.

@laughsoharditssilent

5 күн бұрын

I can hear it perfectly at only half volume. I think its you bro

@Eibon_of_Iqqua

2 күн бұрын

I can hear it fine

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